2） 二十岁的时候，从图书馆借的是《莎士比亚全集》、《一个青年艺术家的自画像》和《尤里西斯》。三十岁之后，床头摆的是《跟庄秘笈》、《ELLE》和《经理人的个人魅力》。

    学生译文：At the age of twenty, The Collected Works of Shakespeare, The Portrait of an Artist as a Young Man, and Ulysses were borrowed from the library. After thirty, Strategy of Speculation on Stocks, ELLE and Manager’s Personal Charm were put on the bedside. (此译含dangling modifier，为英语非规范表达。)

    改译：At the age of twenty, I borrowed books from the library like Shakespeare’s Complete Works, A Portrait of the Artist as a Young Man, Ulysses. After thirty, on my bedside, lie such books and magazines as The Recipe on Stocks, Elle and Manager’s Charm.

    点评：两译相比，最大的区别在于，前者“尾轻”，后者“尾重”。英语句法的审美趣味倾向于“尾重”。试比较（前者为佳句，后者为拙句）：

    Gone are the days when I was young. Vs. The days when I was young are gone.  

    Word came that bribery has sent him to prison, which amazed us. Vs. Word that bribery has sent him to prison came, which amazed us.

    而汉语却没有此习惯。汉语说：我年轻的日子已经一去不返。/ 他因受贿（或行贿）而被捕入狱的消息传来，我们大吃一惊。

    3） 二十岁的暑假，在家乡的大街上偶遇自己的暗恋对象，听说他考上了研究生，被他的进步所打击，心如刀绞，想到这辈子终于不能出色得让他看我一眼，不禁怆然泪下。三十岁之后，到处打听哪里可以花钱买个MBA。

    学生译文：At 20, during a summer holiday I encountered my beloved one on the street of my hometown. I heard he was admitted to be a graduate. I was struck by his advance. I couldn’t help shedding tears in my extreme grief. I thought that for this life I could never achieve much to let him see me in a new light. After 30, I inquire everywhere where to purchase an MBA certificate.

    改译：At the age of twenty, I ran into the young man whom I loved in private in the street of my hometown. Upon hearing that he had been enrolled as a graduate, I was virtually dealt a heavy blow, believing reluctantly so painful a fact that I could never do well enough to win his favor, bitter tears streaming down my cheeks. After thirty, I busy myself here and there, inquiring where I could buy an MBA diploma.

    点评：语言学家曾形象地将英语句子称为“葡萄型”结构，葡萄主干很短，其上附结着丰硕的果实。而汉语句子则较短，一个短句接一个短句地往下叙述，逐步展开，信息内容像竹竿子一样一节一节地通下去，很少有叠床架屋的结构，因而常被称为“竹竿型”结构。因此，英汉互译就犹如“葡萄”与“竹竿”之间的转换。如：

    The boy, who was crying as if his heart would break, said, when I spoke to him, that he was very hungry, because he had had no food for two days.

    寥寥两行，竟然有六个分句，而主句(The boy said…)很短，却悬挂着五个分句。

    而相应的汉语表达却是，用节节短句，逐层展开：

那个男孩哭得似乎心都碎了，我问他的时候，他说他已经有两天没有吃东西了，他实在是饿极了。

    两译类比，前译用了六个短句，而后译仅用了三句。尤其是Upon hearing that he had been enrolled as a graduate, I was virtually dealt a heavy blow, believing reluctantly so painful a fact that I could never do well enough to win his favor, bitter tears streaming down my cheeks.一句，是典型的“葡萄型”结构，主干很短，仅I was virtually dealt a heavy blow 而已。而“挂结”其上的，有介词短语，有分词短语，分词短语中还含有状语从句，还有独立主格结构。洋洋洒洒，架床叠屋。须知，英语以此句型为美，而过多的短句的排列，被贬为baby English。