Memories of My Melancholy Whores

-- Gabriel García Márquez

《我那些苦难婊子的回忆录》蒋方舟译

英汉两种译文对比之

第09部分

张放

【说明】这个自然段里，最大的问题是：“我们那个年代的青少年，对生活总是一副贪婪的嘴脸，忘了一开始对未来的期待，直到有一天，发现所谓未来，并非想象中的未来，这时，便开始虚伪地怀旧。”这几乎就是“心灵鸡汤体”，可惜原英译文的意思，与此很远。

【请继续连续性地阅读马尔克斯的小说英译本】

The only things that remained the same were my columns in the newspaper. Younger generations launched an attack against them as if they were assaulting a mummy from the past that had to be destroyed, but I maintained the same tone and made no concessions to the winds of renovation. I remained deaf to everything. I had turned forty, but the young staff writers named it the Column of Mudarra the Bastard. The editor at the same time called me into his office to ask me to conform to the latest currents. In a solemn way, as if he had just thought of it, he said: The world is moving ahead. Yes, I said, it's moving ahead, but it's revolving around the sun. He kept my Sunday column because he could not have found another cable editor. today I know I was right, and I know why. The adolescents of my generation, greedy for life, forgot in body and soul about their hopes for the future until reality taught them that tomorrow was not what they had dreamed, and they discovered nostalgia. My Sunday columns were there, like an archeological relic among the ruins of the past, and they realized they were not only for the old but also for the young who were not afraid of aging. Then the column returned to the editorial section and , on special occasions, to the front page.

【蒋译】唯一没变的，是我在报纸里的专栏。年青一代像摧毁木乃伊一样对它发起了攻击，我保持着自己的腔调，对革新之风气毫不妥协，对一切异议装聋作哑。四十岁时，年轻的员工把我的专栏命名为《穆达拉老混蛋有话说》。编辑把我叫到他的办公室，要求我跟紧时事。他做出一副深思熟虑过的样子严肃地说：时代变了。是的，我说，往前走了，可不还是围着太阳转么。他保留了我的周日专栏，因为找不到其他能干的编辑。我自信自己是正确的。我们那个年代的青少年，对生活总是一副贪婪的嘴脸，忘了一开始对未来的期待，直到有一天，发现所谓未来，并非想象中的未来，这时，便开始虚伪地怀旧。我周日的专栏还在那儿，像摧枯拉朽地毁灭旧时代后伫立的废墟，他们意识到，我的专栏不仅是给老人看的，还给那些不畏惧变老的年轻人。我的专栏回到了社论版，偶尔甚至在头版。

【张评】

1、“from the past that had to be destroyed”漏译。

2、“the young staff writer”不是“年轻的员工”，而是年轻的“年轻的记者同

3、“Dramas históricos: LA LOCURA POR LA HONRA, 1610; EL BASTARDO MUDARRA, 1612;

EL CASTIGO SIN VENGANZA; etcétera, etcétera... ...”Lope de Vega Carpio，系17世纪西班牙剧作家。

4、“The editor”，这里是指“栏目主编”的意思。从上下文分析，也是这个意思。

另参考英英对“editor”的诠释：1. a person having managerial and sometimes policy-making responsibility for the editorial part of a publishing firm or of a newspaper, magazine, or other publication. 2. the supervisor or conductor of a department of a newspaper, magazine, etc.: the sports editor of a newspaper.

5、“In a solemn way, as if he had just thought of it, he said:”不知为何译成了“他做出一副深思熟虑过的样子严肃地说…”。

6、“The world is moving ahead”本来可以直译，并很好理解，不知为什么要译成“时代变了”。

7、“cable editor”译成“能干的编辑”，可能是把“cable”误看成“capable”了。问题是，之前也遇到过这个词，并译得不错啊，难道译到这里，忘了前面的内容？

8、“today I know I was right, and I know why.”译成“我自信自己是正确的”，因为漏译“今天”，而使得时光距离感被抹掉了。

9、“我们那个年代的青少年，对生活总是一副贪婪的嘴脸，忘了一开始对未来的期待，直到有一天，发现所谓未来，并非想象中的未来，这时，便开始虚伪地怀旧。”这段话，译得不是一般地失败。这是老头对生活发出的感慨。显然，译者对原文“The adolescents of my generation, greedy for life, forgot in body and soul about their hopes for the future until reality taught them that tomorrow was not what they had dreamed, and they discovered nostalgia.”没有吃透，或者说根本就不太理解作者在说些什么。

10、“像摧枯拉朽地毁灭旧时代后伫立的废墟”读中文就不通顺：“伫立的废墟”这是病句。一看原文，才知道是“like an archeological relic among the ruins of the past”

11、“on special occasions”漏译。

【张放试译】

The only things that remained the same were my columns in the newspaper. Younger generations launched an attack against them as if they were assaulting a mummy from the past that had to be destroyed, but I maintained the same tone and made no concessions to the winds of renovation. I remained deaf to everything. I had turned forty, but the young staff writers named it the Column of Mudarra the Bastard. The editor at the same time called me into his office to ask me to conform to the latest currents. In a solemn way, as if he had just thought of it, he said: The world is moving ahead. Yes, I said, it's moving ahead, but it's revolving around the sun. He kept my Sunday column because he could not have found another cable editor. today I know I was right, and I know why. The adolescents of my generation, greedy for life, forgot in body and soul about their hopes for the future until reality taught them that tomorrow was not what they had dreamed, and they discovered nostalgia. My Sunday columns were there, like an archeological relic among the ruins of the past, and they realized they were not only for the old but also for the young who were not afraid of aging. Then the column returned to the editorial section and , on special occasions, to the front page.

唯一没变的，是我在报上的专栏。年轻人攻击它，好像在攻击一具必须毁掉的从过去留下来的木乃伊。但我仍旧保持不变的腔调，对革新之风，丝毫不为所动。我（甚至）对一切（新）事物，都充耳不闻。那年我40岁，但年轻的同事记者们给我的专栏起个绰号叫“姆达拉二逼专栏”（姆达拉系西班牙十七世纪剧作家L.V.卡皮奥笔下滑稽人物 —— 译注）。同时，专栏主编把我找进他办公室，希望我能与时俱进。他唬着脸，好像才想好这事似的，说道：世界正在一路向前。是的，我说，是在一路向前，不过，它也正绕太阳转呢。他（还是）把我的周日专栏留了下来，因为他还没能另找到个有线编辑。今天看，我知道当时的我是对的，并且也明了了个中原因。我这一代的年轻人们，（尽管）渴望生活，却从身体到灵魂，把对未来的诸多希望给遗忘了。直到现实生活教训了他们，明天并非他们所梦想的那样。于是，他们发现了怀旧情绪。我的周日专栏依然立在那里，仿佛过去废墟里（残留）的一堆考古遗物。而且，他们也意识到，这专栏不仅仅写给老人看，同时也是写给那些不怕变老的年轻人看的。接着，（我的）专栏又调回到评论栏目里面，还有就是，遇到某些特别场合，还会被推到头版上去。