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　------评山东诗人墨未浓的乡土诗　　

（诗歌评论）　　

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    认识山东诗人墨未浓名字，是近几年在国内一些诗歌杂志上。后来，我沿着这个名字折射出光线进入了他的博客。随后，又走进了诗人纯净的心灵世界。读了诗人大量的诗文后，我感觉到一个诗人的心灵跳动。他的诗歌题材广泛，而且涉猎很多人们未知的领域，他的诗歌传统，表达的方式呈现的美好愿景，通过直抒胸臆手法表现的豪放淋漓。充分彰显　淡墨飘香诗意浓出一个诗人的精神和傲骨。他诗歌里的词语量和信息量包容了煤矿乡村城市，循着他诗歌脉络就可以看出诗人的生活经历和在岁月里留下的闪光印记。诗人是学土木工程专业的，他的诗歌里就隐藏着他所学专业的精髓。尽管他已经脱离了专业，但从新的领域里，依然能发现他所学专业渗透出的土木诗歌语境。我认为俄罗斯诗人帕斯捷尔纳克说过的一句话用在他的身上很合适，“我不能按照自己想法去生活，但我可以按照自己的心愿去写作”。其实，对于诗人来说，丢掉专业从事新的领域开辟工作，等于给诗人又开设了一个新的施展才华的场所。阿赫玛托娃说过：“我知道维纳斯是手的产物，我是手艺,我懂手艺。诗人从职业和手艺转向科学，从已知世界转向尚待认知的世界……诗歌中加入手工的味道，才有柔和力。”从土木专业到煤矿，从土地的深处再到土地表面，从城市再到乡村，他始终没有离开一步土地。只不过是调整了一下生存方式，从大张旗鼓的土木工程建设，到细小手工文字雕琢。这恰好对应了阿赫玛托娃说的诗人就是手艺人,1 to 200 or 200 to 1 1 to 200 or 200 to 1Share this Blog Entry: Ant writes:Is it of any value submitting the same article to more that one article directory. I currently submit to your site first and then submit to around another 20 article sites. I am not sure if I am wasting my time because of duplicate content issues?Would it be better just to submit the one article to Ezine and leave it at that or submit to many and gain the backlinks and traffic.Chris Knight responds: I8217;ve always said that it8217;s better to submit 200 articles to (1) directory than it is to submit (1) article to 200 directories8230; and the primary reason behind this is that there aren8217;t 200 directories that you can trust in the marketplace8230;or at least have a good feeling that they will treat your article with respect and plenty of traffic for your contribution.I also think you should put a lower priority on getting backlinks and a higher priority on getting qualified traffic from every article that you syndicate. Let the backlink love take care of itself and don8217;t make that a focus8230; Focus on quality and quantity for your original article submissions and reject sites that don8217;t at least give you as much traffic as we do per article submitted.Lastly, we8217;re not a directory any more, but rather an expert author community. 8230;semantics, but thanks for submitting to EzineArticles.com first! This is one of the things we work very hard to make our site attractive enough, benefits delivered wise, to earn your first submission before going to other sites. 领悟佛语。　　

    读了诗人墨未浓很多诗歌作品之后，我感觉最诱惑我的还是诗人的乡土诗歌吸引我的视线。循着他的诗歌光环我可以找到我们的祖宗和人类最本质发祥根源,1 to 200 or 200 to 1 1 to 200 or 200 to 1Share this Blog Entry: Ant writes:Is it of any value submitting the same article to more that one article directory. I currently submit to your site first and then submit to around another 20 article sites. I am not sure if I am wasting my time because of duplicate content issues?Would it be better just to submit the one article to Ezine and leave it at that or submit to many and gain the backlinks and traffic.Chris Knight responds: I8217;ve always said that it8217;s better to submit 200 articles to (1) directory than it is to submit (1) article to 200 directories8230; and the primary reason behind this is that there aren8217;t 200 directories that you can trust in the marketplace8230;or at least have a good feeling that they will treat your article with respect and plenty of traffic for your contribution.I also think you should put a lower priority on getting backlinks and a higher priority on getting qualified traffic from every article that you syndicate. Let the backlink love take care of itself and don8217;t make that a focus8230; Focus on quality and quantity for your original article submissions and reject sites that don8217;t at least give you as much traffic as we do per article submitted.Lastly, we8217;re not a directory any more, but rather an expert author community. 8230;semantics, but thanks for submitting to EzineArticles.com first! This is one of the things we work very hard to make our site attractive enough, benefits delivered wise, to earn your first submission before going to other sites.  

    诗人的组诗《诗写乡下》“为什么我的眼里常含泪水/只因我的诗笔对乡下情浓意深/这种登场道白，一下使我想到中国许多老诗人对祖国家乡深厚的情愫。读着这样的诗句仿佛回到母语。　　

    有位诗人说过，我们是从语言进入的诗歌，再从语言离开诗歌。陕北的信天游和郭小川诗歌的陈述方法就是这种风格。每次凝眸家乡那堵班驳的老墙/都会使我忍不住热泪盈眶/见物思亲，怎不让人热泪盈眶啊！你看那雨后的玉米在疯长/你看那豌豆花儿多像璀璨的星光/我挽起裤腿行走在家乡的小河旁/洗衣的农家姑娘笑声咯咯秋波荡漾/面对诗意磅礴的村庄/我颤抖的诗笔没法搁放/油绿中泛着金光的地瓜秧子盘伏着大地/一簇簇花生棵子排成有序的诗行/我看到父亲的汗水在玉米地里流淌/我听到玉米拔节的声音铿锵而响亮/这优秀的庄稼总也抛离不了农民的希望/就像沉默寡言的农人在心中酝酿力量/为什么我的眼里常含泪水/只因我的诗笔对乡下情浓意深”一处处一点点一个瞬间一个场景一个细节，都是让诗人流泪的激发之处。有人说过，“一首诗歌是用两种东西凝成的，一种是血，一种是泪。泪水是诗人情感的真实流露，而血液总是流淌在离伤口最近的地方”。而《诗写乡下》里的斑驳老墙、玉米、豌豆花、河边洗衣的姑娘等等等等，这些细节怎不让诗人流泪心动哪。捷克诗人里尔克说过：“因为生活和伟大作品之间，总存在着某种古老的敌意”。其实，诗人的作品本身来源于生活，但它又远远高于现实生活。生活和作品，本来就存在着对立和矛盾。我记得诗人艾略特说过：“如果你不是一个现实主义者,Cheap Supra Shoes UK，你将会毁灭；如果你仅仅是一个现实主义者你也将会毁灭,Supra Skytop Black。”他从城市写到乡村，到生活的地方寻找文明闪光的碎片，诗人向我们呈现了宁静安详类似伊甸园和桃花源的没好愿景。同时，也让人读到了诗人的心境。　　

    中国山水画家在描绘乡村恬静画面时，用简单的黑白灰三原色呈现意境。在技法上运用点、皴、染等表现技法。目的就是营造美好自然和谐安逸的理想境况。诗人墨未浓在表现乡村时在情感里也添加了色彩。　　

    诗人在《芋头啊芋头》这首诗里也像写意画一样掺加了色彩。“这盘伏在大地之上的藤萝玉带/在凸起的垄沟之间/龙行虎步/草绿色的卵形叶子蓬蓬勃勃覆盖在心上/那些黄色的绿色的花儿钻出茎穗/一簇簇聚拢在一起/情语切切/你啃噬着贫瘠的土地把泪滴落在心里/母性的光芒漂白了你的浮躁与喧嚣/我椭圆形的目光怎能抵达你红色的/瓜熟蒂落/这婆婆娑娑的草本植物来自于诗经那棵/大树枝枝蔓蔓都透着原始的灵光和草气/你是远古中俗不可耐的草莽/匍匐中有你平凡而坚实的信念/你在穷乡僻壤之间默然而立/生命的绿色擎在大地之上/累累的果实红彤彤的地藏身于泥土/你与我其实是孪生兄弟/我们的来去都与泥土有关”绿色的卵石，黄色的花，红色的瓜，在色彩里加入了大量的情感色彩。把植物拟人，是诗人的表现手法，不如说是诗人对家乡一草一木的刻苦铭心。　　

    有一位哲人说过，诗人是当今社会仅存的最后一批拥有童话的人,1 to 200 or 200 to 1 1 to 200 or 200 to 1Share this Blog Entry: Ant writes:Is it of any value submitting the same article to more that one article directory. I currently submit to your site first and then submit to around another 20 article sites. I am not sure if I am wasting my time because of duplicate content issues?Would it be better just to submit the one article to Ezine and leave it at that or submit to many and gain the backlinks and traffic.Chris Knight responds: I8217;ve always said that it8217;s better to submit 200 articles to (1) directory than it is to submit (1) article to 200 directories8230; and the primary reason behind this is that there aren8217;t 200 directories that you can trust in the marketplace8230;or at least have a good feeling that they will treat your article with respect and plenty of traffic for your contribution.I also think you should put a lower priority on getting backlinks and a higher priority on getting qualified traffic from every article that you syndicate. Let the backlink love take care of itself and don8217;t make that a focus8230; Focus on quality and quantity for your original article submissions and reject sites that don8217;t at least give you as much traffic as we do per article submitted.Lastly, we8217;re not a directory any more, but rather an expert author community. 8230;semantics, but thanks for submitting to EzineArticles.com first! This is one of the things we work very hard to make our site attractive enough, benefits delivered wise, to earn your first submission before going to other sites.

     他们用诗歌为人类呈现童话。诗人的情感天真而纯洁，诗人的心地善良而脆弱。在诗人的《蝉龟》中写到“在大地和树木的缝隙里/生存还是死亡/都是一种奢望/无边的黑夜到来之前/你积蓄了几年的期盼和渴望/重锤般叩响大地之门/去圆飞翔的梦想/人类的贪欲和自私无处不在/生命的雏形被阴森森的/强光击落在襁褓之中/那未展的翅膀和梦想/箭折陈地/弱者的抗争和挣脱/很难打磨光明与魂灵/生命的叶子上下沉浮左右摆动/像那远古中的引吭高歌/像那一生中孤注一掷的飞行/即是瞬间也是永恒/在静寂中寻找生命的出路/在沉默中等待飞翔的时机/你凸现的双眼像利刃/击痛人类的心灵/那贪欲的双手缚住了/你娇小的躯体/却缚不住你歌唱的热情/生命是短暂的/歌声是无限的/歌唱中有你泣血的隐痛”这首诗歌通过对蝉这个人间歌唱的昆虫精灵描写，从中看到诗人对细小动物的怜爱与理解，通过它映射到现实生活。这样的写作才是一个真正诗人的目的和灵魂发现。　　

    我国著名油画家罗中立有一幅名画《父亲》，现在陈列在中国美术馆，它已经成了镇馆之宝。而诗人墨未浓的《扶玉米的父亲》就是《父亲》的解读。“风雨消退了/扶玉米的父亲/在陷脚的泥土中稳稳战立/泣血的玉米东倒西歪/扶玉米的父亲，脸色铁青/眼睛里泪泪光苍茫/一次又一次毕恭毕敬地弯下腰脊/一棵棵玉米挺直耸立/扶玉米的父亲抓起一把坚实的泥土/如同抓起了丰收和希望/培实在玉米的根基/扶玉米的父亲/双脚焊接在泥土里/两注焦灼的目光/如同两根坚挺的木杖/支撑着玉米和我们/茁壮成长。”读了这首诗歌，我感到心里很沉重，我的眼前仿佛出现了整个田野正在举行着玉米金色的葬礼，田野里钉满了反抗鸟，玉米被运走了，剩下了玉米秸秆干枯的尸体,Cheap Supra Shoes，而挣脱下来的玉米颗粒又被一些小鸟吞进的歌唱的喉咙。玉米的命运被诗人描写的深刻而动情，我仿佛看到了父亲和一根枯黄干枯的玉米秸站在一起。他们的合影是最好人生的写照。　　

    读完《燃烧的麦子》这首诗，我突然想到当年我在农村下乡的时候。我的眼前出现了一望无际的金色的麦浪。“麦子，我流泪的眸子/洞穿你金黄色的忧伤/你丰腴而美丽的身体/透过月光抚摩我的心灵/好久了，我看到母亲不停地/清扫陈年的大缸/那大片大片的灰尘/被封锁在仓廪之外/麦子，我滴落的泪水/砸响了城市的水泥地板/啼血的麦鸟叫声急促/熟了，熟了/我看到母亲的身子瘦了/皴裂的双手沟沟坎坎/沧桑而诱人的麦子啊/你这古老而经年累月的草本植物/有多少农人为你毕恭毕敬地/弯下黄金之腰/麦子，我四肢不勤的躯干里/有你的供养和温柔/在这个浮躁而油腻的时代/还有多少纯洁像你一般实实在在/日光下，我看到你纯朴而忧伤的锋芒/像那燃烧的火把/照亮农人的心。”诗人张凡修曾经写过很多关于粮食和农作物的好诗，他笔下的麦子棉花读后令人不忘，他把粮食写到了人的骨髓里和灵魂里。　　

读了诗人墨未浓的诗，让我体会到另一种陈述表达的方式。这首诗歌里的细节非常细腻感人，就像当年我下乡时的情景再现。大场景，大画面，重细节，重描写，是诗人整组诗歌的特色。诗人在其他诗歌里的写作手法也是这样呈现的，这里我不一一再举。　　

读了诗人墨未浓的组诗《诗写乡下》后给我很多联想，他的诗歌在传承中国诗歌草根文化的同时，又升华了自己独特的表现形式。场景，画面，色彩，细节，语言，语境都很到位。是值得我学习和借鉴的。　　

说了诗人墨未浓诗歌这么多的优点，最后我还是想说一点我的个人看法，诗人在陈说的过程中，尽量简洁。古人说，语不惊人死不休。诗歌写作，能一个字，尽量不用两个字，能用一行表白，绝对不多说一行。尽量不把诗歌写成散文。短诗不好写，短文章更不好写，能把两种文体都写好更不容易。　　

我祝愿诗人墨未浓会达到两种兼备的诗人素质。　　

我所写的文字，供诗人参考，不妥之处，批评。祝好。　　

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