陆游《钗头凤》英译对比资料

（曾冲明2017年1月25日旧稿整理新发）

　　《钗chai头凤》 陆游

　　红酥su手，黄藤teng酒，满城春色宫墙柳。

　　东风恶，欢情薄，一怀愁绪，几年离索。

　　错，错，错。

　　春如归，人空瘦，泪痕红浥鲛绡透。

　　桃花落，闲池阁，山盟犹在，锦书难托。

　　莫，莫，莫。

　　【注释】　　“红酥su手”：“东风恶”，春寒料峭，可怜女子的细手冻得又红又肿。　　“黄藤teng酒”：也许是“葡萄酒”，也许是“人参酒”，总之不是一般的“黄酒”，而是泡制的高级酒，暗示此女子身在富贵人家。　　“满城春色宫墙柳”点明她的住址，也暗示她的富贵身份。陆游与原配妻子唐婉都是书香门第，有钱人家。　　“人空瘦”：“空瘦”形容消瘦得很厉害。这要跟“红酥su手”一起理解。“空”译成In vain（枉费，白费了），我不敢苟同。　　“闲池阁”：绍兴沈园很可能有池塘与楼台亭阁。　　“浥”：沾湿。“鲛绡”：按《现代汉语词典》，“绡”是生丝，或表示“绸子”；“鲛”是鲨鱼。但“鲛”这里可能通“皎洁”的“皎”，表示“洁白”的意思。“泪痕红浥鲛绡透”译成白话是：眼睛哭得红肿，眼泪湿透了洁白的丝绸手帕。　　“锦书难托”：难以找到人

James Jr. Liu译：

　　Chai Tou Fent

　　Tune “Phoenix Hairpin”

　　       by  Lu You

Pink creamy hands,Yellow-labeled wine,

Spring colours filling the city,

willows by the palace walls.

East wind hateful,

Joys of love scarce,

One heart full of sad thoughts,

How many years of separation!

Wrong, wrong, wrong!

Spring the same as before,

She grows thin in vain;

Red are the stains of tears 

that have soaked the mermaid-silk scarf.

Peach blossoms fall,

Ponds and pavilions quiet;

Though maintainous vows remain

Letters of brocade can’t be sent.

No more, no more, no more!　

Burton Watson译：（见文殊《诗词英译选》，外语教学与研究1989年10月出版）

　　Tune: “Phoenix Hairpin”

　　    by Lu You　　

Pink tender hand,　　    

yellow-corded wine,　　   

city crammed with spring hues,     

willow by garden wall:　　    

east wind hateful,　 

the one I loved cold ---　　

a heart all sadness,　　

parted how many years?　　

wrong! wrong! !wrong!　　

Spring as always,　　

Someone grown needlessly thin,　　

Red tear stains wet the kerchief,    

soaking through mermaid gauze.　　

Peach petals falling,　　

Stillness of a pond pavilion:　　

Mountain-firm vows go on forever,　

But a letter would be useless now -　

Don’t don’t don’t　　

许渊冲译：

　　THE GARDEN OF SHEN 

　　TUNE: PHOENIX HAIRPIN

Pink hands so fine,

Gold-branded wine,

Spring paints the willows green 

palace walls can’t confine.

East wind unfair,

Happy times rare.　　

In my heart sad thoughts throng;　　

We severed for years long.　　

Wrong, wrong, wrong!　　

Spring is as green,　

In vain she’s lean,　　

Her kerchief soaked with tears and red with stains unclean.　　

Peach blossoms fall　　

Near deserted hall.　　

Our oath is still there. Lo!　　

No word to her can go. 　　

No, no, no!

　　译文选自许渊冲先生《唐宋词一百五十首》（北京大学出版社，1992年9月出版，322页——325页）。关于标题THE GARDEN OF SHEN，许渊冲先生用英语写了如下注释：　　In the spring of 1155, the poet met in the garden of Shen his first wife Tang Wan (See), whom he loved dearly, yet was compelled to divorce. Tang Wan offered him the gold-branded wine and he wrote this poem to which she wrote another in reply (See).

黄新渠译：

To the tune Cai Tou Feng(Tune: "Phonix Hairpin")

     Lu You  ( 1125-1210 )

You offered me a cup of golden wine,

With your pink creamy hands.

The whole town was flooded with spring,

Palace walls were covered with willows green.

Alas, the harsh east wind broke up our love!

Full of deep sorrow,I have tasted the separation,

For long years after our parting.

A great error, a great error,

It's a great error beyond repair!T

he beauty of spring remains,

Yet you are thin for love in vain.

Your red kerchief is soaked through

With tears stained with rouge.

Now peach blossoms have fallen;

Deserted here are the ponds and pavilions.

Even though our love pledges remain true,

There's no way to pass our love letters through.

Everything's over, everything's over,

My everlasting regret is beyond cure!

雨打萍译：

    Ornamental-Hairpin-Phoenix 

   To the Melody Chai-tou-feng 

                by Lu Youh （1125—1209）

Your pretty hands hold the Vine-wine-in-yellow.

The whole city is full of spring views

   with the vernal palace-wall willows.

The east wind is wicked to blow,

My mood is unhappy and low

My mind is gloomy with sorrow

I lived my solitude life several years ago.

Something wrong, oh, oh, oh.

Spring came as it did ago.

But in poor health were you.  

your handkerchief was wet as tears were to flow.

The peach blossoms fell

The pavilion over a pond seemed to be idle.

An oath in mind was still told

but no note was easy to go,

No, no, no.

蓝庭的博客：

Thy ruddy fine hands came up

With wine in a yellow cup

In the spring-filled city of willows and palace wall.

In an easterly wind faulty,

Our passion disappear’d.

A whole bosom of woeAnd loneness for years.

Ough, ough, ough!

The same spring comes again,

But you’ve got skinny in vain.

Your teardrops bedew through 

your red silk kerchief, always,

Peach blossoms fall

Round deserted ponds an’ hall.

Still there is our oath,

But between us no letter goeth.

No, no, no!

曾冲明译二稿：

稿一

To Love No More 

　　         by Lu You　　    

Her red cold handswith ,　　

The sweet yellow wine;　

We meet under the spring willows　  　

By the red wall of palace.　　

The terrible east wind and　　

Love gone away with it;　

Two hearts are both full of sorrows,　　

Alas! how long we have parted!　　

It’s wrong, wrong, wrong with our lot!　　

The same spring seems to return　

While she is still thinner and weaker;　　

Her red eyes are filled with tears,　

Their stains on her white silk scarf.　　

Peach blossoms fall down　

The pavilion by pond quiet;　　

While our vows remain,　　

But  love can’t be sen with letterst.　　

Alas! it's no more, no more, no more! 

稿二     You and I  

           by Lu You

I can never forget your pink creamy hand

As you offered me the wine of good brade.

The town was full of beauty in springtime,

The palace wall covered with willows green.

But The east wind ill and our love left thin.

We both were filled with pains and sorrows,

Which so heavy during our separation for years.

That was wrong and wrong decision for us both.

The spring is charming as before,

Yet you are pine for love in vain.

Your red handkerchief is soaked

With sorrowful tears stained vivid.

The peach blossoms have fallen and

The tower by the lake is so deserted.

Though our vow of love true remains,

It’s difficult to express love with letters.

All’s over, everything’s over, and forever.