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一篇申请耶鲁大学的Essay范文及点评与分析

(2013-04-25 17:12:04)

      申请Yale University耶鲁大学的Essay范文

      "Heritage" is the first word in my family a dictionary, a noun and adverbs, for who we are and our way of life. My parents tell me, my heritage defnes my identity. Through the honorifc speech to my elders and abide by the traditional values, I accept the part of Korean culture, I defnes duality of life in the United States.

      However, the troubled not united in surface rushed into the peaceful coexistence. Although I on the surface of the model represents South Korea American son, I hate ftting the stereotypical mold. My shell is so good, however, others mistook me for a successful immigrants. I feel I am like a fundamental structure from my American tear birthplace, plunge into the vacuum between my ancestral home and the world I live in. I think my heritage is a short to anchor of the rising momentum: I have to break free-or bankruptcy.

      In this struggle chain, however, I realized that I offer what the heritage. As a martial arts coaches, I support students build self-discipline ability and character. Hong Kong is a bilingual teachers, I helped the children of immigrants are adapt to life in the United States. Soon, I realized that my heritage is a musical instrument coordination personal development and service to others.

      When I was elected to congress HOBY of leading the world, my family's case is not involved in the fnancial required the cost of us $1350. My American enterprise energy through the inculcation and Asian medicine, I discussed by selling herbal products cost in my martial arts studio. Although new company took me to the edge of bankruptcy, I insist. Through the research products, competitors and customers, I simplified my stock in order to best service to my customers.

      Finally, I created a business, aims to provide other health way of life. Sweating students in one gulp green tea and chocolate-favored snack, give up dollars, lying in my career cardboard box. Support external donor, I become more Los Angeles in Washington's ambassador injected new ideas, I went back to the project grant spread martial arts way of life, and confdence discipline, respect.

      As my heritage anchor laid the foundation of his own fight itself, I and my American integrated traditional Korean identity. Fusion service and the obligation of citizens, I entered the Los Angeles county sheriff's explorer institute. Through the strict training, I learned to work as part of a team. Appointed military instructor a year later, I control the training older recruits.  through some relations of mutual respect, I prepared my platoon dedicated to serve the society. Lead the more mixed group of race, I still is beyond my his identity of duality. I soon found that my heritage must go beyond my personal effort really believe in diversity.

      Heritage is not only race label-it's an honor and human nature, I insisted that inspiration. Today, I thank my parents gave my soul dedication and determination. They granted the philosophy that through my behavior. The inheritance I the integrity of the foundation forms as an individual, and defnes I committed to strengthening social, I live in.

      申请美国耶鲁大学的Essay范文点评与分析Analysis

      What makes the writer of the article, funny, he wrote about his ethnic heritage of the conflict between his life and in the United States. We immediately realize that it is not an easy fusion between South Korea and the United States his identity. It may increase his introduction has provided an example, when the two identity conflict. However, he was on this conflict is very strong, visual, as readers, we can tell the truth of detection, his inner struggle. He wrote, "I think my heritage is a short to anchor of the rising momentum: I have to break free-or bankruptcy." The author aptly demonstrated his achievement and the connection between the admirers of his heritage. When he describes his efforts to raise funds to attend HOBY congressional leaders the world, featuring his creativity as a creative entrepreneurs. Recruit students offcers must admire his energetic fundraising activities and his development of a new market. His experience shows his innovation, durability and ability to adapt to his product series, he of the customer's needs.

      In his case, the Los Angeles county sheriff's explorer college, he again talks about his heritage when leading a group of students, the ethnic diversity. Although you can write an article about you work of a project, as a team or an experience, you as a member of the group, and it's always useful to emphasize your personal contribution. In the author's case, he showed all his responsibility to sell Asian medicine, and explained his role, as a leader, his line. You may not be the only organization leader, but write about your personal input to make a more powerful statement than show the contribution to the group as a whole.

      In his in the paper, the authors make the connection is not obvious. In the first glance, there seemed little relates in together, attend a student leaders meeting or the public security departments and volunteer racial identity. But the author is to the link between these themes, it generates in a single cohesion sex article. His writing is fascinating, because, as readers, we can see that he really care about his subject matter and he Shared that when he accomplished.  example, but perhaps most important, he took us in his heart, so at least in a brief time we know his thoughts, feelings and reasoning. This is the recruit students offcers always desire-to learn something new to the applicant and understand his or her way of thinking.

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