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2015年2月14日雅思写作真题范文

(2015-02-20 08:14:05)
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2015年2月14日雅思范

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手机该不该被禁止

TASK2:The use of mobile phone in certain places is just as antisocial as smoking. do you think mobile should be banned like smoking?

解析:这道考题应该算是比较简单的,一是话题(手机使用)本身不难,是考生们所熟悉的。另外,观点也应该容易得出。凡事必有利弊,科技运用的主动权一直都掌握在人们手中,人不能因噎废食,科技产品如小小的智能手机只是工具,能否给人类带来利取决于人们如何去使用它们。

这里想说的是文章的布局,从剑桥官方范文来看,大多数有明显倾向性的文章除了让步段以外,都给出了两个支持段。相比市面上所谓的高分范文或名师们给出的四段式,个人感觉此类结构更合理,有侧重点,说服力上也略胜一筹。大家觉得呢?

以下是Amy为大家提供的主体段和结论部分的中文思路供参考:

body1:让步承认缺点
1.吸烟污染空气破坏环境, 手机通话侵扰私人空间;尤其很多司机在驾驶过程中接听手机分散注意力,往往造成交通事故;

2.正如吸烟有害身体健康一样,长时间使用手机对身体也有害。手机辐射,过多盯着手机屏幕对视力有害;


body2好处1 :: 但是手机对现代人们日常生活的重要性是不可否认的。

手机的主要通话功能依然为人们所需要。保证拥有手机的人能随时联络。相比于传统邮件或写信,手机通话方便快捷。

body3 好处2 :新一代手机增加的新功能丰富了人们的生活。比如:智能手机有拍摄记录功能,便于人们随时随地记录身边有趣的事儿。由于相比电脑等其他科技设备,手机轻巧便于携带,人们更倾向于运用手机上的社交功能满足自己的社交需求。另外手机开通支付功能,日常水电煤气缴费以及网络购物均可通过手机轻松搞定。

Conclusion:吸烟对吸烟者和周围的人都有害,但手机如果合理使用,却能给现代人们的快节奏生活带来更多的便利。因此我个人认为不需要禁止手机,但倡导大家正确文明使用手机还是很必要的

Sample Answer by Amy:

Mobile phones are very popular among modern people as they greatly facilitate their daily life. However some people think the wide use of mobile phones causes  problems as well and they should be banned.

 

Advocates of this believe that like smoking which pollutes air, the use of mobile phones causes another kind of pollution, and that is noise. Inconsiderate use of them can be quite annoying. For example, loud conversations on mobile phones in public interrupt the pleasure of a quiet talk with friends. Besides, using mobile phones while driving can be a distraction for drivers and considered as a main contributor to road injuries. What is worse, excessive use of mobile phones can cause damage to people's health. Particularly, too much exposure to the tiny screen can be detrimental to young children's eyes.

 

However, the important role of mobile phones in modern life cannot be denied. First, for the majority of users, mobile phones provide them with easy and convenient communication that nothing else can offer. Compared with letters which take a couple of days or even weeks to reach the recipient, calls or short text messages via mobile phones enable users to stay connected with their social circles in a more efficient way.

 

Moreover, new phones with multi-functions are constantly pushed to the market due to the application of new technology and they add more color to the dull routine. For instance, smartphone users now can share interesting photos or their thoughts on a certain topic wherever they go. Also, convenience is important in modern life and the updated functions meet such need. New smartphones enable users to pay all kinds of bills or make shopping payments effortlessly, saving time for work or leisure. Unlike laptops or other advanced hi-tech devices, mobile phones are smaller, lighter and easier to carry, therefore they gain tremendous popularity among people who needs to travel frequently and keep in touch with outside world. 

 

In conclusion, unlike smoking which is definitely harmful to smokers and the environment, mobile phones can benefit people if they are properly used. Therefore I do not think it is advisable to ban mobile phones, but guidelines about how to use them in a civilized way are essential.(By Amy)

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