9B月考1作文

The way I deal with pressure 我处理压力的方式

结构：开头1句。---回答Q1(1-2句) 2分--- 过渡句1句。---First, 方法1。1分。展开。1分---Second, 方法2。1分。展开。1分---结尾1句。

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词句：

1.         感到有压力的：feel stressed (out)

2.         有压力的学业：stressful studies/homework/school work

3.         减压，释放压力：

release my pressure/stress,

relieve pressure 减压

reduce my pressure,

relax myself,

make myself/me relaxed,

deal with/face the pressure/stress actively

get rid of the pressure/ trouble/ stress

remove the stress/ take away the stress

4.         在巨大的学习压力下：With the heavy burden (负担) of  my study, ……

5.         Pressure/Stress becomes an evil and appears every time I am faced with a big exam.

6.         问题1：I have little time to relax myself because of/ due to the endless homework. It really makes me exhausted every day.

7.         过渡句：What should be done (主语从句) is to deal with it actively(表语).

8.         for instance = for example

9.         方法：reading, listening to music, go cycling/ playing badminton (physical activities), talk with my parents and closest friends

10.     方法：用不同句型。

例如：方法1：For example, listening to some light music makes me feel relaxed.

方法2：Furthermore, another brilliant way to help me reduce pressure is to talk to my friends from time to time.

11.     方法：I practice playing the piano every day, which makes me relaxed and refreshed.

12.     方法(附加)：Reading enables me to broaden my mind and open my eyes.说明你的这个减压方式的好处。

13.     总结：(万能)

Taking all the above-mentioned methods/reasons into consideration, we can easily draw the conclusion (得出结论) that ……

14.     Pressure is really awful to some extent/ in some way.

to some extent从某种程度上说

15.     结尾升华：I enjoy dealing with pressure using these terrific and effective ways, which greatly help me have a positive attitude towards my studies and life.

16.     结尾升华：Nobody lives without pressure. However, once (一旦) we change/turn it into the courage to move on, we will gain great progress/self-confidence, which does good to us forever.

17.     万能/结尾升华：Sometimes life beats you and brings you trouble and pressure, and what you should do is to let the pressure go(让它去)/face it actively and enjoy the colourful world.

例文（根据俞佳宁作文改写）

There is no denying that Grade Nine students are under great pressure with the heavy burden of study. I am no exception. Nevertheless, I have my own ways to face and deal with the pressure wisely. To begin with/ For one thing, I am used to listening to English songs at the beginning of a school day so that I can not only improve my English but also relax myself. What’s more/ For another, I enjoy reading Chinese magazines during lunchtime. Reading can widen my knowledge and broaden my mind as well. In conclusion, since nobody lives without pressure, we are supposed to deal with it in proper ways and have a positive attitude towards life and study.