假如你是李华,一个美国的中学生代表团到你校进行为期两天的参观访问,请你代表学校对他们致简短的欢迎辞。
要点要求:1.
介绍学校 2.
介绍为代表团安排的活动 3. 表达祝愿
注意:
1. 词数100左右;
2. 适当增加细节,行文连贯;
3. 开头和结尾已为你写好。
写作六步法:
第一步:写前分析:审题很重要,英语欢迎辞一般可以分成三段:第一段,代表全体学生表达欢迎。第二段,具体的活动安排。第三段,表达祝愿。
第二步:写作要求:层次清楚,书写工整,高级句式。
评分标准:
第一,是否完成写作任务。
第二,是否分段,层次是否清楚。
第三,是否有高级句式,句式是否多变。句子与句子之间是否有恰当的关联词。总地来说,全文是否表达自然,流畅。
第三步:写前准备:
第一段:表达欢迎。建议可以用下列句式: On behalf of ....(代表。。。)I’d like to extend
our warmest welcome to ....(向。。。表达最热烈的欢迎。。。)
第二段:活动安排。建议句式:The activities are as follows,
including....
第三段:表达祝愿。句式:
Wish you a pleasant trip here! (祝你旅行愉快!)
第四步:草稿试写:
Dear friends,
On
behalf of all my classmates, I’d like to extend our warmest welcome
to you ! (豹头,首段惜字如金,只用一句话点题,做到开门见山,直击主题!得分点:1. 短语on behalf
of...代表。。。 2. extend one’s welcome to sb.向。。。表达欢迎 (不会写extend,可以写express,
也可以。)3.切记不要用小短句,要学会使用一个大长句。记住:一个大长句顶得上好多个小短句。)
I
feel it a great honour to introduce our school to you , my foreign
friends.(猪肚,得分点: 1. feel it an honour to do sth.
(觉得做某事是某人的荣幸。it 是形式宾语,an honour
是宾语补足语,to do
sth 动词不定式做真实宾语。)As we all know, our school is famous for its
remarkable academic achievements. (得分点:1. as we all know,
as引导的非限制性定语从句,“众所周知”, 逗号“,”后面的是主句。2. be famous for sth 以。。。著名,3.
remarkable 卓越的 4. academic achievements 学术成就 。)To welcome you, our school has already arranged a variety
of activities for your two-day visit here. (得分点:1. has already
arranged 现在完成时,时态运用要准确、恰当。 2. arrange sth for sb. 为某人安排某物 3. a variety of 各种各样的。)Firstly, our opera club members can’t wait to put
on their latest opera, Qu Yuan, a well-known
Chinese ancient poet and scholar. (得分点:1. 注意写准备的活动的时候,一定要有层次,需要写出Firstly,... Secondly,....
Thirdly,....等表示层次的连接副词,使文章层次清楚,结构清晰。2.
can’t wait to do sth.迫不及待做某事
3. put on one’s latest opera上演最新的戏剧 4. a well-known Chinese ancient poet and scholar 是同位语,介绍他的身份。)After that, it is highly
recommended that you should take a look at our creative scientific
research. (得分点:1. After that, 这句起到承上启下的连接作用,把第一个活动和第二个活动连接起来。2.it is highly recommended that
....极力推荐做某事。。。3. recommend that + 宾语从句使用虚拟语气,结构是sb. should do sth. should 可以省略。4. creative 有创造力的。)Finally,
we would like to show you around our school. (得分点:1.Finally 最后,表示次序,2.
建议有时间,可以参观一下我们的校园。)
Wish
you a pleasant trip here! (得分点:1. 凤尾,最后一段也就是第三段,一定要短小精悍。切勿拖泥带水!)
Yours,
Li Hua
第五步:写后自检:
1.字数100左右:
第一段:一句话,15字。
第二段:第一句:15字,第二句:13字,第三句:12字,第四句:22字,第五句:17字,第六句:10字。六句话,89字。
第三段: 一句话,6字。全文共110字。字数符合要求。
2. 层次结构:文章分为三段。层次清楚(豹头-猪肚-凤尾),结构完整。符合要求。
3. 句式多变:文章使用了虚拟语气,形式宾语,非限制性定语从句,句式多变。符合要求。
第六步:誊写工整:
Dear friends,
On behalf of all my classmates, I’d like to extend
our warmest welcome to you !
I feel it a great honour to introduce our school to
you , my foreign friends.As we all know, our school is famous for
its remarkable academic achievements. To welcome you, our school has already arranged a variety
of activities for your two-day visit here. Firstly, our opera club
members can’t wait to put on their latest opera, Qu Yuan,
a well-known Chinese ancient poet
and scholar.After that, it is highly recommended that you should take a look
at our creative scientific research.Finally, we would like to show you around our school.
Wish you a pleasant trip here!
Yours,
Li Hua