高三书面表达讲练课-----如何使书面表达漂漂亮亮！

 

 

 

一、观察与思考

 请大家认真阅读和比较下面两篇书面表达，体会那篇文章更好一点。如果你是阅卷人，你会给哪一篇的分数跟多一点！并把不同表达部分画出来！

    假设你是红星中学高二(1)班的学生李华，利用上周末的时间帮助祖父母安排了去北戴河的旅行。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，写一篇英文周记，叙述你从准备到送行的全过程。

    注意：1．周记的开头已为你写好。

            2．词数不少于100。 

Last weekend, I helped my grandparents prepare their trip to Beidaihe. _{www.ks5u.com/gaokao/beijing}

基本分析：

1. 文体：周记。2. 人称：3. 时态：一般过去时4. 事件大意：我为爷爷奶奶准备出行＋我送行5. 图片要素：

图一：查询信息（train ticket, weather, hotel）图二：买票（buy ticket）

图三：准备行装（package）图四：送行（see …off）

                                       A

Last weekend, I helped my grandparents prepare  their trip to Beidaihe. On Saturday morning, together with my grandparents, I searched the Internet for the train schedule, the weather in Beidaihe, and some hotel information. In the afternoon, I went to the train station and managed to buy two tickets for my grandparents in spite of a long queue. Having had dinner, I packed into the suitcase the things my grandparents needed, such as clothes, glasses, an umbrella, and a map. The next morning, I went to the station to see them off. Waving goodbye to them on the platform, I felt happy for them and wished them a safe journey.

                                

                                       B

Last weekend, I helped my grandparents prepare  their trip to Beidaihe. On Saturday morning, my grandparents and I searched the Internet for the train timetable, the weather in Beidaihe, and some hotel information. In the afternoon, I went to the train station to buy two tickets. There were many people waiting to buy tickets, but I bought two tickest. When I finshed dinner, I put into the suitcase the things my grandparents needed . There were clothes, glasses, a map,and so on. The next morning, I went to the station to see them off. I waved goodbye to them on the platform, and I felt happy for them and wished them a safe journey.

二、议一议

 

二、教师点拨

 

三、小试牛刀

 

一）回避策略

 

1.我是出来打酱油的。

 

2.神马都是浮云。

 

3.他在聚精会神的听老师讲课。

 

4. 那人倍儿哏。

 

5. 我会不遗余力的帮助你。

 

6.他学习勤奋。

 

 7.  我迫不及待的想见到他。

  二）高级词汇和复杂结构策略

 

1. 我有一本书，我还有一本词典。

 

2. 我不在屋里看电视，我要出去打篮球。

 

3. 他进屋之后，他打开了电视。

 

4. 他比较聪明，而且他很勤奋。

 

5. 虽然下雨了，他还是按时赶到学校。

 

6. 他很少去看电影。

 

7. 在湖的周围有很多树。

 

8.我们要尽全力制止污染。

 

9. 我建议我们早点出发。

 

四、实战演练(小组合作，四人讨论)

    下面一篇书面表达，从用词到句式等方面比较简单，但是基本把要求的内容比较正确的表述出来。试一试能否在从用词或句式方面改善一下！相信自己！！！

 

May 1st Saturday                                                                       Fine
My friend and I went to the Xiangshan Mountains at about 8 in the morning. On the way, we found a lot of people were standing around some foreigners. We found the foreigners were looking worried. One foreigner was injured. Because they didn’t know Chinese, they couldn’t communicate with others. We walked up to them and got to know one of their friends was hurt in an accident. And also they had little money with them. So we telephoned the police and they took the injured person to hospital with us. They thanked us because we helped them..
We didn’t go to the Xiangshan Mountains, but we did a good deed and we learnt a lot from it, we felt very happy.

 

 

 

五、作业----巩固练习

 

以吸烟有害健康为题写一篇短文，字数120左右，内容要求包括：
　　1. 现状：中国吸烟者约占将近一半，吸烟者越来越年轻，甚至有少数中学生也在抽烟。
　　2. 原因：有的认为是时髦(a kind of fashion)、有的认为是乐趣、有的认为可以提神(refresh   oneself)。
　　3. 害处：吸烟有害健康，可导致多种疾病，是一种金钱的浪费，甚至会引起火灾。
　　4. 劝告不要吸烟。