（原诗属五步抑扬格，3交韵连英雄双行体；拙译每行10字，以AAAA BBBB ccCC CC韵谐之。） 

 

Lyke as a ship that through the Ocean wyde,

似一艘船穿行浩瀚海洋，                                    A

   By conduct of some star doth make her way,

   可信赖的某星为她导航，                                 A

Whenas a storme hath dimd her trusty guyde,

风暴来时星辰晦黯无光，                                    A

   Out of her course doth wander far astray.

   船儿漂泊得迷失了方向。                                 A

So I, whose star, that wont with her bright ray

我的星辰，为云翳所挡住，                                 B

   Me to direct, with cloudes is overcast,

   —它惯于以光亮为我指路—                              B

Doe wander now in darknesse and dismay,

我遂在黑暗、沮丧中踯躅，                                 B

   Through hidden perils round about me plast.

   我所处之方位险情四伏。                                  B

Yet hope I well that, when this storme is past,

可我好盼望：待风暴消停，                                  c

   My Helice, the lodestar of my lyfe,

   赫里斯*—北极星—我的生命，                         c

Will shine again, and looke on me at last,

会再闪耀，终于将我盯紧，                                 C

   With lovely light to cleare my cloudy grief.

   以迷人光线扫清我阴云。                                  C

Till then I wander carefull, comfortlesse,

此之前，我独自翼翼小心—                                 C

In secret sorrow and sad pensivenesse.

在隐忧、悲思中彷徨逡巡。                                 C

               —by Edmund SPENSER（1552—1599）

 

译注：*赫里斯（Helice）—即指北极星。

 

【附1】：Tulip十一言亦步亦趋韵译本—

 

 

像一艘穿越浩瀚大海的船           A

 

 凭星辰指引【朝着目标】远航       B

 

当可靠的向导遇暴风【袭卷】       A

 

 黑暗就会【把她抛向】那迷茫     B

 

 

 

我的星辰习惯以它的亮光           B

 

 为我导航，此刻被乌云覆盖        C

 

黑暗焦虑使我【们】迷离惊慌        B

 

 临危的隐患【却从】四周【扑来】    C

 

 

 

然而我期盼，这场风暴经过          D

 

 我的北斗，我生命的北极星         E

 

将再次闪现，最终面容照我         D

 

 它的光辉，把我的阴云扫尽         e

 

 

 

而在之前，我一直惶惶不安          A

 

默默忧伤，沉浸在凄凄惨惨         A

 

—埃德蒙·斯宾塞（1552—1599）

【附2】：胡家峦教授亦步亦趋韵译本—