壮写的FCE180字作文。他写故事比较擅长，就是把字数控制好不太容易。我让他少往monster上跩，可他写完我一看，还是这个题材。我要求他少写对话，多些描写和情节，但180字似乎只够他开个头的，还是没有多少情节。老师倒是表扬说这篇挺好，可以当范文了，所以刊登一下。

When he heard the doorbell ring, Jim ran as fast as he could to answer the door, he wanted to get there before his two older sisters. He wished he hadn’t, otherwise he might not have been pulled into this messed up fantasy of gods and monsters. Standing in the door way was his best friend Lucy, she was about 2 inches shorter than Jim, she had blond hair and startling green eyes. Jim thought that she was the prettiest girl in the world. Today she looked frightened, which was strange since she was always smiling. “What’s wrong?” he asked. “You’re in terrible danger!” Lucy announced in a trembling voice. “What?” asked Jim. “There’s no time to explain! Just come on!” she said urgently. “They’re coming for you!” “Wait, who is coming for me?” Jim asked, confused. Right on cue the house across the street collapsed with a jaw-rattling CRASH! That got him moving, they sprinted across the lawn, Jim glanced behind him at the thing that had just knocked over the house, it was a three headed dog the size of a large dump truck.

To be continued …

这篇是课堂上写的，老师说能得8.5分。

When Ally got home, she was surprised to find that no one was in the house. She went in the kitchen and saw there was still a half baked tray of cookies lying halfway in the oven. She tried to call her parents, but all she got was voice mail. Panic began to close around her chest, when the doorbell rang, she nearly jumped out of her skin. She tip-toed to the door and opened it with shaky hands. It was her best friend Janet, her long brown hair fell loosely around her waist, her icy blue eyes sparkled in the bright afternoon sunshine, like a disco ball. “Hi,” she said cheerfully, “Want to come to the park?” she asked. “Sure,” Ally answered. As they walked to the park, Janet suddenly asked, “Have you seen your parents yet?” “No,” replied Ally. Then several things happened at once, a metallic blue X 6M screeched to a stop in front of them, the rear doors flew open, a set of strong hands grabbed her, she struggled and fought but it was futile. She woke to the sound of Janet calling her name, it had all been a bad dream.