写作教学案例---期中考试考场优秀作文讲评

【博主按语】

这是本学期期中考试阅卷时发现的一篇优秀作文，该考生所写的故事续写与原文

过度自然，所写的两个段落衔接合理，故事有创意，写作语言简单句、复合句能很好地搭配，比较恰当地使用了-ing形式做状语、独立主格结构、倒装句等等。

例如：

1.To avoid this amusing embarrassment, I studied history harder, hoping that I wouldn’t make this mistake.

2.Only by working hard can you get another chance to change your awful situation.

3.I thanked her for what she said, waiting patiently for the chance to come around.

4.Confidence filling my mind, I went on the stage, showing my fluent voice.

      更难能可贵的是，该考生能在考试这么有限的时间内在文章的结尾处恰当地引用了英文歌曲Waiting for love中的歌词，从中可以看出该考生过硬的语言功夫。

     另外，考试题所选材料也是一段文字非常地道、优美的文章，很值得反复阅读品味。

   在讲评这次考试的写作题的过程中，除了和同学们一起分析试题、赏析这篇佳作外，最后也一起欣赏了这首优美的歌曲Waiting for love的MV。

期中考试读后续写题：

第二节 读后续写(满分25分)

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Proudly reading my words, I glanced around the room, only to find my classmates bearing big smiles on their faces and tears in their eyes. Confused, I glanced toward my stone-faced teacher. Having no choice, I slowly raised the report I had slaved over, hoping to hide myself. “What could be causing everyone to act this way?”

Quickly, I flashed back to the day Miss Lancelot gave me the task. This was the first real task I received in my new school. It seemed simple: go on the Internet and find information about a man named George Washington. Since my idea of history came from an ancient teacher in my home country, I had never heard of that name before. As I searched the name of this fellow, it became evident that there were two people bearing the same name who looked completely different! One invented hundreds of uses for peanuts, while the other led some sort of army across America. I stared at the screen, wondering which one my teacher meant. I called my grandfather for a golden piece of advice; flip (掷) a coin. Heads—the commander, and tails—the peanuts guy. Ah! Tails, my report would be about the great man who invented peanut butter, George Washington Carver.

Weeks later, standing before this unfriendly mass, I was totally lost. Oh well, I lowered the paper and sat down at my desk, burning to find out what I had done wrong. As a classmate began his report, it all became clear, “My report is on George Washington, the man who started the American Revolution.” The whole world became quiet! How could I know that she meant that George Washington?

Obviously, my grade was awful. Heartbroken but fearless, I decided to turn this around. I talked to Miss Lancelot, but she insisted: No re-dos; no new grade. I felt that the punishment was not justified, and I believed I deserved a second chance.

注意: 1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

 2．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

Paragragh1:

Therefore, I threw myself heartily into my work for the rest of the school year.

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Paragragh2:

Ten months later, that chance came.

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考生考场作文：

下面是歌曲Waiting for love的一个网络链接：

https://video.tudou.com/v/XMjM5NDk1MzMxNg==.html?__fr=oldtd

教学启示：

语言学习的目的不仅仅是为了考试，英语语言的教与学都应该回归语言的本质，语言学习的渠道也必须超越课本，英文歌曲、影视、视频、网络等等都是学生获取语言的源泉，学生接受的接近真实的英语语言的熏陶越多，其语言能力自然越强，学生的语言素养的提升需要得到大量的这种熏陶和沉淀，到了一定水平后在写作时优美的词句就会flow out naturally，相应地在英语考试中也自然会取得理想的成绩。

2017版新的《高中英语课程标准》中也已经把学生英语学习的技能由原来的听、说、读、写四种技能，变为现在的听、说、读、写、看（viewing）五种技能。