Some people think the government should stop putting money in art programs and put the money in more important fields such as sports facilities, medical care or national defense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It's a hot-debated issue wether（whether） the government should spend money in fields like sports facilities, medical care or national defense instead of art programs or not, with many people are convienced（being convinced） that issues associate(associated) with individual development and country safety are far more important. However, others hold the opinion that expenditures on art programs is justified.

There are several reasons why governments should not finance art programs. Firstly, artists should have to follow the same rules as the rest of the market. Once there's a demand for their artwork, they'll be rich.（这段话的论述有点问题，题目说政府投资一些艺术，并不是给艺术家钱啊，所以这个论述有点跑。） Secondly, putting money on which art program usually depends on the taste or preferences of the politicians. But the main reason why government shouldn't spend money on art world is that there are important areas such as sports facilities, medical care and national defense which need the money first. These issues play an important role in people's daily life.

On the other hand, it would be wrong to say that governments should stop putting any money at all in art programs. Everybody needs some beauty in their lives, but not all of us can afford a Van Gogh or a piece of music. Governments should provide money for museum or concert halls for everyone. Anther point is that art allows people to express themselves and this is definitely good for society , culture and thought. Last but not least, artists can contribute to economy by producing music, films and attracting tourists.这段的论据不足，艺术可以让我们享受生活，陶冶情操，释放压力，提升道德标准，我在讲义中对于艺术的重要性有总结，你可以去翻翻。

All in all, governments should prioritize their spending carefully, but they should also allocate some of their budget for art programs. It is part of their duty on society and to future generations.

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3^rd,March,2010

整体的语言感觉不错

但只能得到5.5

需要改进的问题：

1.首先，这是一篇agree or disagree的题目

所以，最适合的结构应该是5段一边倒式。

建议改为5段

2.有些简单语法错误，尽量避免。

3．如果按照四段式来看，这个“平衡”还是没有处理好，

最后一段观点的表明和中间段落的论述没有一个线索。