加载中…【英语作文】李辉老师教作文(5)如何巧思怪招得高分
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高分作文特征：
1.内容相关
（切题即可）
2.结构清晰
（分几段？每段怎么写？）
3.语言精彩
（高级词汇、复杂句式）
第一讲：如何写出史上最漂亮的字体
目标：clean &
clear
要求：
1、大小一致；
2、落在线上；
3、避免毛刺；
4、用一条横线修改；
第二讲：如何选择史上最帅气的单词
【例1】
Adj. 聪明的、脑筋好的
clever
→smart
→wise
→bright
→intelligent
【例2】
Adj.令人惊奇的
surprising
→amazing
→astonishing
【例3】
English is very important, so we
must learn it well.
English never fails to be of
growing importance in the modern world, as a result, we high school
students are supposed to master(掌握) English as soon as
possible.
史上最帅气的单词满足四大原则：
1、晚词优先
（1）Adj.困难的
difficult
→challenging 有挑战性的
（2）Adj.重要的
important
→vital 至关重要的
→essential 必不可少的
→significant 有重要意义的
（3）Adj.美丽的
beautiful
→appealing
吸引人、引起人兴趣的
→attractive 吸引人的
→enchanting 迷人的
→charming 迷人的
→fascinating 迷人的
2、短语优先
（4）v. 参加
join→take part in
（5）v. 使用
use→make good use
of
（6）最常见的换词：形容词=of+名词
very important → of great
importance
very difficult → of great
difficulty
very beautiful → of great
beauty
very useful → of great
use
very helpful → of great
help
very valuable → of great
value
very significant → of great
significance
very necessary → of great
necessity
3、“具体词”优先
（7）Adj. 学习
learn
→study 研究
→pick up
偶然学到，顺便学到，轻松学到
→master 掌握
（8）Adj.
大白是个好老师
Big White is a good
teacher
→Big White is a kind, patient
and knowledgeable English teacher.
4、大纲词汇的衍生词优先
（9）adj. 很多
many
→countless，endless，unlimited，innumerable，immeasurable，incalculable，numberless，numerous
（10）adj.
不开心的
sad
→
discouraged，depressed，downhearted，disheartened，low-spirited
第三讲：如何造出史上最精彩的句子
常见错误：动词原形作主语
对策：汉语中用动词作主语或宾语时，英语中使用：
（1）Doing sth +
v.
（2）To do sth + v.
（3）It + v. （+ for sb）+ to do
sth.
练习：掌握英语需要练习。
（1）Mastering English needs
practice.
（2）To master English needs
practice.
（3）It needs practice (for us) to
master English.
史上最精彩的句子有三个特点：
1、细节丰富：用细节表达你的所见所想；
2、避免重复：重复是水平低的表现；
3、化繁为简：当别人苦苦学习复合句时，你已然拥有了最神奇的造句技术……
（一）如何做到细节丰富？
1、抽象变具体
口诀：尽力使用表意明确的单词，并适当增加细节成分。
【例1】
I go to school
everyday.
I ride to school
everyday.
I ride to school every
morning.
With the sun rising from the
east, I, together with Big White, ride to school at 6:00 every
morning, feeling rather excited.
【例2】
Big White is a good
teacher.
Big White is a kind, patient and
knowledgeable English teacher.
Young as Big White is, he is a
kind, patient and knowledgeable English teacher who knows how to
enlighten us students.
【例3】（2010北京卷情景作文第二幅图）
I went to the station to buy the
tickets.
In the afternoon, I took the
subway to the Beijing railway station to buy the
tickets.
In the afternoon, I took the
subway line No.2 to the Beijing railway station to buy the
tickets.
2、裸奔穿外衣
名词不可裸奔：1、多个形容词；2、同位语；3、定语从句；4、非谓语动词作定语；
动词带上情感：5、小状语位置；6、多个动词并列
【1】在名词前面（多个）形容词
形容词是名词的衣饰，衣饰要华美。
【例1】你应该理解你的妈妈。
You should understand your
mom.
You should understand your kind,
dear and hardworking mom.
【例2】
Once there was a family living
in a cabin under a tree. It's branches and leaves protected the
family.
Once there was a happy family
living in a small cabin under a huge tree. It's strong branches and
thick leaves protected the family from wind and rain.
【2】名词后面加上同位语
同位语就是名词的“等价物”！
【例1】我们应该掌握英语。
我们青少年应该掌握英语这门世界上最广泛使用的外语.
We teenagers are supposed to
master English, the most widely used foreign language in the
world.
【例2】我们高中生应对我们自己的未来负责。(be
responsible for sth)
We high school students are
supposed to be responsible for our own future.
【例3】他们那些外国人对我们中国人评价很高。(speak
highly of)
They foreigners speak highly of
us Chinese people.
【3】名词后面加上定语从句
当汉语中用“动词+的”修饰名词时，英语中用定语从句。
【例1】他所工作的地方离这儿很远。
The place is far away from
here.
The place where he works is far
away form here.
【例2】她照顾了十多年的那个老人上个月去世了。
The old man whom she had looked
after for ten years passed away last month.
【例3】他是一个能与我荣辱与共的真正的朋友。
He is a true friend of mine, who
can share joy and sadness with me at any time.
【4】非谓语动词作定语
（后述）
【5】小状语位置加副词
“助系情之后，实义动词之前。”
【例】
English
is
I
You
should
I
can
万能单词：
undoubtedly
毫无疑问地
obviously
显然地
evidently
明显地
definitely
当然地
apparently
显然；表面上
【6】多个相关动词并列使用
【例1】Your mom loves
you.
Your mom gave birth to you, has
brought you up and loves you the most in the world.
Your mom loves and cherishes
you.
【例2】You should understand your
mom.
Your should understand, love and
respect your mom.
3、巧加小尾巴
六个尾巴句型：
1、表原因
...，for...
..., because...
..., considering
that...
in that...
owing to that...
2、表结果
...，so...
..., as a result,
...
..., therefore, ...
..., （and ）consequently,
...
..., （and ）accordingly,
...
3、表目的
... to do sth
... in order to do
sth
... so as to do sth
... in order
that...
... so that...
4、表程度
... so + adj/adv +
that...
步骤一：adj/adv
前面加so
步骤二：句尾加that
步骤三：that
后面用一个句子描述adj/adv的程度。
5、表条件
If..., ... 如果
As long as..., ...
只要
6、评论刚刚写完的一句话
...，which... = 这件事
小结：
绝招一：抽象变具体；
绝招二：裸奔穿外衣；
（1）名词：形容词、同位语、定从、非谓；
（2）动词：小状语位置、动词并列；
绝招三：巧加小尾巴；
（1）原因 （2）结果 （3）目的
（4）程度 （5）条件 （6）评价
练习：You should understand your
mom.
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