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首先声明，这篇文章绝对不是针对这位同学的。恰恰相反，他的作文写得还真不错。只是想通过这篇文章和他的范文修正一个普遍存在的写作问题，那就是我们到底要不要写让步段。也巧了，接连两天都有同学问我相同的问题。

另外，学生盲目地使用让步段与老师有直接的关系。我很遗憾有些同行不负责任的教导和一些书籍的误导。

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请仔细，耐心阅读，然后做好提分的准备。

首先来看看这位同学的作文：

（别人还能用虚拟语气呢！厉害了！）

WRITING TASK2

Some people think that all levels of education, primary, secondary and futher education should be free to all students.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

 Nowadays, the expenditure on education has been increasing, which has caused violent controversy. Therefore, there are arguments that schooling should be free no matter which period students in. However, I am not convinced that this would ever happen in the future.

 

Firstly, If spending on education was exempted absolutely, the quality of traditional schooling would be endangered. The reason for this is that schools are not charities, it is necessary for them to pay the salaries of teachers and purchase textbooks and facilities that used in daily teaching, which are fundamental components of high-quality education. Hence, when tuition is excused, conditions and strength of schools may degenerate, which would impair prosperous development of education.

 

Moreover, if all levels of education were free to students, the opportunities would not be cherished. That is to say, the importance of study may be rudimentary. A case in point is that large amount of families which cannot afford to provide the schooling expenses of children are supported by relatives and governments and the hardship teaches and encourages children who are helped to perform well. However, once education turns obtainable to everybody, the chances would be worth nothing for some. In this case, cancelling the tuition are not the optimum choice.

 

Admittedly, it is beneficial for part of citizens to be educated without financial burdens. However, as I mentioned earlier the quality and value of traditional education would be dismantled because of easy access to each level of education. What is more crucial is that measures should be taken to control the cost instead of making it free.

 

In conclusion, My belief is that schooling should not be made free no matter how strong nations become. Although freeding tuition can be helpful for students under certain circumstances, it is the responsibility of individuals and society to protect the quality and importance of education from degeneration.

我的回复如下：

作文已阅。如果在不压分的情况下，你可以得6.5分。而且你的语法很好。

 

  但是，这里我要说个大家写作普遍存在的问题：

  Admittedly这种让步段写法已经被滥用。而且这种写法有一些弊端，

1，给考官模板的感觉，太格式化。

2，自己那石头砸脚。为什么非要在前两段把对方辩驳一番后，又说自己的问题呢。

  事实上，如同考官simon所说，如果真觉得对方观点在一定情况下有一定道理，那么你就写个balanced idea。

如果非要写让步段，而且确实觉得对方观点在一定情况下有道理，你不妨试试唐叫兽下面的结构：

  I disagree with the opinion that....

  Most importantly, ...你的最有力分论点

  Moreover, ...你其次最有力的分论点

  While it is probably true that ...+ 对方优势, the fact is that...+ 反驳。

  In conclusion,...

  或者你还可以这样：

  I disagree with the opinion that...

  It is probably true that...+ 反方优势，since ...+原因 （这段别写多了，3句就够，简单说说对方的优势和原因，不要太展开）

  In spite of this, I would argue that...+ 最有力的分论点反驳

  Moreover, ...你其次最有力的分论点。

 In conclusion,...

  我的书中，文化类话题第一篇你可以好好看看。

  当然，我的书里也有关于让步段的写法，但是，我们需要改变，因为考官对于这种手法已经烂熟。所以，以上结构仅供参考。

另外，我的写作方法从今年开始已经变成了四段式，这个绝对是个3.0升级版。有机会来北京上唐叫兽的线下课就知道了。

  Good luck !

 

另外，这里引用下我书里的原文：

我们是不是非要写个让步段？

（本文摘自唐老师个人博客，有兴趣可以来看看blog.sina.com.cn/passielts）

  昨晚跟一个学生电话聊天，放下电话一阵后脑子里只记得一句话：Don't fuck yourself! 笑死我了。这句话的故事是这样来的。

  故事是这样的：昨晚微博突然接到一条私信，一老烤鸭求助，想问问我有关雅思写作的事情，并询问我可否电话里具体说说。我说可以。电话通了之后，了解了他的大概情况，我让他发了一篇他的大作文到我邮箱里，我帮他具体看看问题。一分钟后收到作文，阅读完后发现该生写作文笔流畅，虽没有耀眼的词汇，但是语法也几乎没有什么问题，基本上是起步6分的苗子。可惜一点，写作的清晰度欠缺。这个完全是个致命伤。其实，作为考官，最反感的文章就是那种“闷骚型”的文章，观点暧昧，模糊。说到这里，他也说自己明白自己这个问题。因为他给老外写过作文，老外很生气的回了一句：Don't fuck yourself! Don't be on the fence（摇摆不定）

  其实这个就是说是否我们写雅思议论文真的有必要写一个让步段？

  我的回答是：看情况！但是，绝对不能为了写让步段而写让步段,那样就是fuck yourself，吃饱撑了没事儿干。举个例子吧：some people think learning a language should also learn its culture and lifestyle. do you agree or diagree? 此题地球人的观点都是：YES！而且一边倒的写完全可以，因为明显这样做的好处很多啊。因此，此题写让步段是没有必要的。如果写了一个让步段，反而把上面自己写的两段给扳倒了，造成中间段落模糊。

  最后我想说，让步段只是在你觉得对方观点确确实实存在一些道理的情况下，你写出来才有用。如果对方道理不是那么明显，那么直接将其观点列出来，根本用不着任何肯定，然后一顿反驳即可。

欢迎大家留言、吐槽、发表自己对于这问题的感想。

最后做个硬广：

本月针对托福考试我有4场网络点题课。详情下载app，托福easy姐。

It's getting cold.

Take care.

唐叫兽

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