阅卷回来话写作

[写作内容]

       学校最近组织了一次中美学生交流活动，你参加其中的“大学校园生活”讨论。听完Mike的发言之后，你准备写一份发言稿，题目是“Preparing Myself for College Life”，内容要点包括：

1. 以约30个词概括Mike的发言要点；

2. 然后以约120个词谈谈你理想的大学生活，内容包括：

  (1) 对中学生活的感受；

  (2) 理想的大学生活；

  (3) 中学生活和大学生活的差别，以及你打算如何适应。

[写作要求]

1. 在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

[评分标准]

   概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

 Preparing Myself for College Life

   At first Mike didn’t adjust himself well to the college life because of the lack of basic life skills and homesick. However, he got himself active in things and gradually enjoyed his new college life.

  It is obvious that high school life is quite different from college life. We generally study the basic knowledge and seldom work out a project by ourselves. Additionally, most of us live with our parents and we aren’t independent enough to live alone. High school life is more simple than college life.

  However, college life is more challenging and colourful. An ideal college life is meaningful and full of challenges. Students not only study their own majors but also learn how to realize their dreams. They meet more new friends and gradually go into the real society.

  I enjoy my high school life a lot, which provides me with lots of skills and valuable experience. But I discover that I still lack some important life skills, which requires me to improve myself. In order to adjust myself to the coming college life, I decide to gain more knowledge about the society and life skills. I will try my best to become an independent mature college student.

  All in all, I’m looking forward to the new college life. I will prepare myself well and made improvement bit by bit.

  点评：

    一、看短文可知，该考生能够认真审题，较好地把握住了命题人命题意图。该文中心突出，立意积极向上能够给评卷人耳目一新的感觉，计较而言容易产生评高分的冲动。

    二、从篇章的语言质量来看，行文通畅，一气呵成。用词准确，能够较好地使用常用句型。比如，宾语从句，定语从句，主语从句，不定式，固定短语，倒装句等，但给人的感觉是语言那么的自然、畅顺、朴实、真切，看不出矫揉做作、机械套用、词汇句型贫乏之英语写作之常疾。

    三、从谋篇行文的思路看，该考生思维敏捷，应试能力很强。能够很轻松巧妙自然地享用或转换阅读材料中的地道词语、句型、句式。

    从以上三个方面来看，这篇短文不论是考生的语言功底本身还是其展现出来的应试能力，都确实是一篇值得其他考生学习和借鉴的好文篇。

 附： 读写任务写作阅读

    第二节 (共1小题,满分25分)阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

    Hi, I am Mike. I just went through my first year of college. The toughest part on me at first was the general adjustment.1 went to a very small high school where my mom was a teacher and she did practically everything for me. But at the college I needed to know some basic life skills. such as balancing a check—book, laundry, and the things you have to be able to handle that I never thought of in the high school! It was really tough for me at first and I got badly homesick.

  Once that first semester was over and I got used to the college life, I loved it—good facilities, helpful instructors. and a good library. The Students’ Union organizes various parties every week. I also go to cinemas and concerts, and often spend Saturday nights in pubs and clubs.

  One thing I think is important is to get yourself active in things. I was on the dance team in college and met a ton of people that way ··· it was so much easier to make friends when you had a common ground.