[1] 第一部分是“我”对夏天的男孩提出的批评。

[2]这里霜的轻屑（jacks of frost）是一个双关语，另指人名（Jack Frost），即央格鲁撒克逊传说中的冰人，出现于秋末冬初，据说会捏人的指尖和脚趾，并在窗玻璃上留下冰花。

[3] 请参看注8。

[4] 幻想的拇指，原文是fairy thumbs（仙女拇指），评论家们认为这里暗指手淫。

[5] 多籽的漂移（seedy shifting），原文中seedy除了多籽之外，还有破烂不堪之意，指夏天男孩“正在毁灭”。

[6] 燥热的脉动（dogdayed pulse）也是双关语，dogday指三伏天，同时诗人也用了它表面的意思，即“狗之日”，暗示像狗那样吠叫。

[7] 第二部分是夏天的男孩对“我”的指责所提出的回应。

[8] 午夜和中天之月原文是一整个复合词（moon-and-midnight），个人推测是双关语，在空间上，指月亮在天空的正中间；在时间上，指夜的中央，即午夜。这个词和前面的黑舌之钟一起构成一个隐喻，即黑夜像钟，而月亮就像钟中央的钟舌，黑舌之钟即没有月亮的夜晚。因为少了月亮这个钟舌，没法把钟敲响，所以只能摇响星辰的铃铛。

[9] 这里直译是“痉挛的爱侣”（lovers in their cramp），但从前后文理解，应喻指爱侣之间的性行为（相互紧抱乃至于挤压变形）产生了生命。

[10] “白皙的死者”（fair dead）应指母体中的婴儿，海洋指羊水。

[11] 矿灯，原文是戴维灯（Davy's lamp），是一位英国科学家于1815年发明的一种矿灯，可以避免因在矿井中开灯而引起瓦斯爆炸。

[12] 花圈同时暗示着死亡和诗歌

[13] 把快活的乡绅钉在树上（nail the merry squires to the trees），令人同时想起圣诞节（MerryChristmas）和受难节（复活节过后五天，春分月圆之后的头一个星期日，是耶稣被钉死在十字架上的日子）。这里暗指生和死被“夏天的男孩”混合在一起。

[14] 第三部分是做为批评者的“我”和被批评的“夏天男孩”两极归一。



附：英文原版

I See the Boys of Summer 
Dylan Thomas 
 

I see the boys of summer in their ruin 
Lay the gold tithings barren, 
Setting no store by harvest, freeze the soils; 
There in their heat the winter floods 
Of frozen loves they fetch their girls, 
And drown the cargoed apples in their tides. 

These boys of light are curdlers in their folly, 
Sour the boiling honey; 
The jacks of frost they finger in the hives; 
There in the sun the frigid threads 
Of doubt and dark they feed their nerves; 
The signal moon is zero in their voids. 

I see the summer children in their mothers 
Split up the brawned womb's weathers, 
Divide the night and day with fairy thumbs; 
There in the deep with quartered shades 
Of sun and moon they paint their dams 
As sunlight paints the shelling of their heads. 

I see that from these boys shall men of nothing 
Stature by seedy shifting, 
Or lame the air with leaping from its hearts; 
There from their hearts the dogdayed pulse 
Of love and light bursts in their throats. 
O see the pulse of summer in the ice. 
   
But seasons must be challenged or they totter 
Into a chiming quarter 
Where, punctual as death, we ring the stars; 
There, in his night, the black-tongued bells 
The sleepy man of winter pulls, 
Nor blows back moon-and-midnight as she blows. 

We are the dark deniers, let us summon 
Death from a summer woman, 
A muscling life from lovers in their cramp, 
From the fair dead who flush the sea 
The bright-eyed worm on Davy's lamp, 
And from the planted womb the man of straw. 

We summer boys in this four-winded spinning, 
Green of the seaweed's iron, 
Hold up the noisy sea and drop her birds, 
Pick the world's ball of wave and froth 
To choke the deserts with her tides, 
And comb the county gardens for a wreath. 

In spring we cross our foreheads with the holly, 
Heigh ho the blood and berry, 
And nail the merry squires to the trees; 
Here love's damp muscle dries and dies, 
Here break a kiss in no love's quarry. 
O see the poles of promise in the boys. 
   
I see the boys of summer in their ruin. 
Man in his maggot's barren. 
And boys are full and foreign in the pouch. 
I am the man your father was. 
We are the sons of flint and pitch. 
O see the poles are kissing as they cross.