新东方网薛鹏（雅思小鹏哥）原创范文：孩子是由祖父母带还是送去托儿所

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备注：图片美丽儿童为小鹏哥的儿子笑笑。

写作感言：

 

雅思写作不仅仅展示的是语言的才华，更加考验一个人的人生阅历和思想深度。本文写作一气呵成，15分钟内对着VIP学员打字完成，因为有感而发。

我的小儿子笑笑今年两岁了，从三个月开始就在美丽的小城通化和姥姥姥爷一起长大。在三个月开始就每天去儿童游泳馆游泳和玩耍，他有琪琪等自己的好友，阿姨们也喜欢笑笑。岳父岳母对于孩子的成长倾注了全部的心血，笑笑也给老人和我们带来了无穷的乐趣。今天的笑笑已经有了自己的思想和超前的语言技能，自信开朗， 身体健康。笑笑是小鹏哥的生命的延续和希望，是小鹏哥无怨无悔地努力工作的动力。

2015年3月14日雅思写作回忆（小鹏哥版）

 

教育类：（新题出现）

Some working parents believe childcare centers can provide best care for their children, others believe that family members like grandparents can do a better job. Discuss both sides and give your opinion? 

 

布局图：

首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

二段：正方观点的展开：一定要有对于细节的展开或例证的支持

三段：反方观点的展开：一定要有对于细节的展开或例证的支持

尾段：再次亮明观点＋总结理由

 

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新东方网薛鹏原创范文赏析：

首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点+ 作家立场

Children’s growth education is a great concern for a great many parents, however, not every parents have enough energy to look after their kids，so, people often fall into a dilemma when facing with the question of  sending their children to childcare centers and asking relatives to take care of them. As I see it, encouraging children to grow up under the care of grandparents is a superior choice although daycare center can sometimes has an auxiliary role to play.

 

解析：look after sb = take care of sb = see to sb = attend to sb v 照顾某人

解析：people often fall into a dilemma when facing with the question of A and B 人们在面对……的时候，经常陷入两难选择

解析：under the care of sb 在……的关照下

解析：is a superior choice v 是一个更好的选择

解析：has an auxiliary role to play v 可以发挥辅助性的作用

 

薛鹏点评：首段个性开篇；主题明确；文风朴素

二段：谈及我方观点的合理性：（我的口吻）

The striking advantage of inspiring grandparents to see to their beloved children is that those kids who are in the formative years can receive custom-tailored education，due to the connection of blood tie，grandparents，in most cases，will show more enthusiasm for their children and provide intensive care. In other words, grandparents usually interact with children ceaselessly , smile at children a lot and work hard to communicate with them. However, some toddlers might be spoiled if they are solely educated by their grandparents and thus lead a undisciplined life.

 

解析：beloved children n 心爱的孩子

解析：toddlers n 初学走路的孩子

解析：children = those kids who are in the formative years 孩子们

解析：receive custom-tailored education = receive custom-made education v接受量体裁衣的教育

拓展：Spare the rod and spoil the children 孩子不打不成器

拓展：Blood is thicker than water 血浓于水

点评：二段讨论祖父母教育孩子的利弊。

 

三段：谈及对立观点合理性（我的口吻）

I have to concede that daycare center still enjoys some merits in helping kids grow up smoothly and healthily. More precisely,   pre-school childcare centers are usually well-quipped with recreational facilities and caregivers can foster the child's intellectual, language, social skills. Meanwhile, kids can acquire precious group experience and feel more childhood joy deriving from peers. Nonetheless, as for childcare center, teachers are, sometimes, too busy to provide each child with patient guidance and desirable care.

 

解析：daycare center = childcare center n育儿中心

解析：helping kids grow up smoothly and healthily 帮助孩子们顺利地健康地成长

解析：patient guidance and desirable care 耐心的知道和令人满意的关怀

解析：feel more childhood joy deriving from peers 感受同理人带来的乐趣

解析：are usually well-quipped with recreational facilities 配备有精良的娱乐设施

点评：谈及儿童去早教中心的利弊

 

尾段：再次亮明观点 + 总结理由

In closing, my stand is that both grandparents and childcare centers have indispensable role to play in cultivating a healthy, happy and confident child. The best strategy is to let grandparent assume the responsibilities of taking care of children until the age of three, however, grandparents can send their kids to daycare centers to interact with other peers during the daytime or over weekends, some well-equipped swimming pool for children can serve as a good example

 

解析：both A and B have indispensable role to play in…… 两者在……中都可发挥不可缺少的作用

解析：The best strategy is that 最好的策略就是……

解析：assume the responsibilities 承担责任

解析：well-equipped swimming pool for children 设施齐备的儿童游泳馆

解析：can serve as a good example 就是很好的例证

 

点评：尾段明确呼应首段观点，强调孩子最好在三岁前由祖父母来带，但是，可以在白天或者周末的时候去儿童游泳馆玩耍，这样孩子成长就可以得到来自亲人和育儿中心的双方的利好。

雅思小鹏哥原创语料库：

1.        strengthen the family tie  v 增强家庭纽带

2.        daycare centers = childcare center  n 幼儿中心

3.        early childhood education institutions n 儿童早教学校

4.        mental growth, good charter-training and the cultivation of group experience brought about by attending nursery school  由上托儿所带来的精神成长，性格训练已经群体性经验的培养。

5.        learn to communicate and associate with their peers v  学习和同龄人交流交往