薛鹏原创雅思写作范文赏析：探险旅行的利弊以及美图分享

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2015年1月29日雅思写作题目

旅游类：

Currently, some scientists or travelers like to travel to remote natural environment such as South Pole, do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. 很多科学家和游客喜欢去遥远的有自然美景的地方旅行，是否利大于弊？

薛鹏点评：利弊讨论；新题出现

薛鹏头脑风暴导言：

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在广西的龙脊梯田，很多外国的背包客会千里迢迢来到这里，久居山间农家，下地种田，吃竹筒饭，观人间奇景，旅居山间是很好的放松身心，加深对于少数民族文化洞察的方式，同时，旅行对于地方的经济有利好，例如，游客的住宿，餐饮，购物增加了地方人的收入。

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对于很多富人，购物之旅已无吸引力，他们宁可花上一大笔钱去南极探险，去非洲探险，甚至，企业家包机去无人岛探险。旅行带来他们新鲜体验，满足他们的好奇心。

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雪屋

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小鹏哥去不了南极，但是，我很想去漠河北极村，那里滴水成冰，如果可以住在冰屋里，一定是奇特的人生体验。

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但是，没有不长杂草的花园，荒野探险，极地探险，背包客穿越原始森林，这类旅行其实是刺激和风险并存，游客的安全有时候难以保障。例如，我读过一个故事，一群旅友去四姑娘山穿越森林探险，一度迷路，走了一个礼拜才脱离险境。同时，对于旅游景区来说，日益增多的游客可能对生态环境造成不良的影响，此外，在增加旅游收入的同时，也可能使当地人增加对于外来旅游收入的依赖。

薛鹏原创雅思写作语料库：

 

1.        enlarge one’s view of life  = broaden one’s mental horizons v 拓宽视野

2.        deepen one’s insight into the culture of minority v  加深对于少数民族文化的洞察

3.        ……  is a good way to relax one’s body and ease one’s mind  …… 是很好的放松身心的方式

4.        enlarge one’s scope of knowledge v 拓宽知识面

5.        can bring a lot of fun and pleasure to the travelers  …… 可以给旅行者带来很多的快乐

6.        …… can add color to their dull routine of daily life  ……可以给枯燥的日常生活增加乐趣

7.        meet their sense of curiosities v 满足他们的好奇心

8.        lean to how to overcome unexpected hardships during the trip v 学习克服旅行中遇到的意想不到艰辛

9.         so that one can become tenacious in terms of personality  所以，人在性格方面变得更加坚强

10.    might impose much pressure upon the travelers economically 也许增加了旅行者的经济负担

11.    The safety of travel is hard to ensure  旅行的安全问题很难保障

12.    The flowing sightseers might ruin the environment  日益增多的游客可能破坏环境

13.    make local people become over-dependent on the external tourism income 使当地人对于外在旅游收入更加依赖

14.    in remote areas with natural beauty  在拥有自然美景的遥远的地区

15.    over the long term  从长远看

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薛鹏原创范文赏析（尊重版权，转载署名，侵权必究）

首段：个性开篇 ＋争议焦点＋作家立场

The market for tourism in remote areas with natural beauty is booming at a startling rate. Today，wilderness tourism or adventure tourism has been drawing adventurers to the frontier's glaciated peaks, untouched wilderness. People have been debating for many years the pros and cons of exploring those remote areas with breath-taking landscape. Personally speaking, those adventurous activities benefit adventurers and local population over the long term.

薛鹏点评：首段亮剑，个性开篇，主题明确，思路清晰。

二段：探险旅行的利好的展开

Seen from the positive aspects，many benefits could be gained via exploring those eye-catching regions. First，as for high-spending tourists, to explore the unknown such as South Pole or Africa is a kind of worthwhile adventure. Traveling exposes them to new places and unique cultures. It is rewarding for them to read about mysterious regions, but， it is even better to visit there in person. What travelers learn by meeting local people and absorbing the culture of these places is something they could not learn in books. For example, my friend Paul is a self-travel fancier, he was drawn to many destinations by their natural landscape and attractive cultures of indigenous people. Secondly，tourism has a key role to play in boosting the local economy. Specifically, the prosperity of tourism has been the prime source of income because visitors will seek accommodations, buy souvenirs or visit the local people’s homes or performances.

薛鹏点评：对于细节的充分展开: 旅行对于游客以及旅行目的地的利好。

 

三段：探险旅行的弊端的展开

Indeed，there is no garden without weeds. First, traveling to those remote or untouched regions sometimes might expose explorers to dangers they are not originally expected to or prepared to defend against. The debate reminds me of a story, a group of self-travelers took a adventure trip in an unexploited mountain without employing an experienced guide， they encountered some unexpected dangers，which even threatened their lives. Further,  those who dwelling in fragile environment sometimes has increased their dependence on the external tourism income when tourism has penetrated their homelands. It is a danger if the tourism season is over.

 

三段：谈及探险旅行的弊端：游客安全没有保障，旅行地对于旅游收入过度依赖。 

尾段：再次亮明作家立场

Overall，there will have more adventurous travels because people’s desire to explore the unknown will never disappear. Curious explorers should raise their self-protection awareness. Meanwhile, efforts should be made to reduce the over-dependence on tourism income.

薛鹏点评：首尾呼应，提出如何解决探险旅行对个人和旅行地带来的弊端。

TIP：明天我和小石头去哈尔滨旅行了，没有大的惊喜，也要找点小快乐啊。