2014年11月22日雅思写作新东方网薛鹏原创范文:网络购物的利弊

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11月22日雅思A类小作文之表格图:关于美国和加拿大留学生的对比。
11月22日雅思A类大作文:
Online shopping is now replacing shopping in store. Do you think it is positive or negative development? 网络购物代替实体店购物,你认为这是积极的还是消极的?
请对比小鹏哥预测核心10题之第一题:
一类重点10题(推荐打造个性范文)
科技类:
People can perform everyday tasks, such as shopping and banking as well as business transactions, without meeting other people face-to-face. What are the effects of this on individual and society as a whole? 人们可以通过网络进行很多的日常事务,不必见面,影响是什么?
薛鹏点评:网络的发达给人们的生活,学习,工作带来便利。很多人可以远程办公,接受网络教育,网络创业,网络购物,网络交流,例证展开。但是,没有不长杂草的花园,网络的弊端可以从社交,健康,新型网络犯罪等角度展开。
2014年11月22日雅思写作解析:
利弊讨论提问标志:Do you think it is positive or negative development?
作家立场:网络购物利大于弊,如果扬长避短。
薛鹏原创范文赏析:
首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点+ 作家立场:
Such is nature to
own what our hearts desire that is why many modern people
like to spend their hardly earned money on their favorite goods.
The contrivance of the Internet has profoundly revolutionized
modern people’s option of consumption in
many aspects. People have been debating the pros of cons of on-line
shopping without reaching any definite agreement. Personally
speaking, the merits of shopping on line prevail
over its possible demerits.
薛鹏点评:个性开篇;句型引导;明确立场。
薛鹏解析:
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二段:利好的展开:
Seen from the
positive aspects, many benefits could be gained by
selecting and buying our favorites
on line. The
most glaring merit is that on-line shopping not only
surmounts the geographical barrier,economize great amounts of time, but also
improves the flexibility of consumption. In
this sense, those who select on-line shopping have more time
to embark on more worthwhile things such as focusing on working or
building up physique. Another
advantage coming from on-line consumption is
that it adds spice to our dull routine of daily life.
A
case in point is that a lot of fashionable ladies
take
pleasure in browsing various on-line shops, comparing
different prices and bargaining with the owners of on-line shops.
They usually end up buying their desirable goods. Last,on-line
shopping will exert
a beneficial influence on one’s financial budget due to the
fact that on-line shops, in
most cases, do not need to rent spacious places or employing
many salesgirls, therefore,
the price of on-line merchandise is, comparatively
speaking,
薛鹏点评:
二段逻辑清晰: 淡化模板;细节展开;表达精彩。
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三段:弊端的展开:
Problems, however, inevitably ensue. On-line shopping is a two-edged weapon which can be used equally for good or evil. One possible demerit is that many on-line advertisements are full of flowery phrases and empty promises, therefore, consumers might be fooled into buying counterfeited goods. Many stories concerning on-line consumption fraud could justify my worry. Even worse,it is highly possible that some young consumers might spend money like water on their favorite goods on line out of the reason of seizing the chances of discount, in this case, on-line buying will impose much pressure upon some unwise consumers economically.
薛鹏点评:谈及网络购物的弊端;论证饱满;体现作家文采。
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尾段:再次亮明观点 + 总结理由
Overall, what is of the utmost importance is to harness the merits of on-line buying and discard its demerits. The government should be urged to strengthen the censorship of on-line ads. Meanwhile, it is the duty of every consumer to raise the awareness of wise consumption.
薛鹏点评:
尾段提出克服网络购物的建议:政府加强传媒审查,个人提高理性消费意识。
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薛鹏原创语料库之网络购物(推荐背诵)
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解析:via = by = by means of= through prep 通过(方式上)
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解析:
diversify v使多元化;enrich v丰富……
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解析:bring huge convenience to 为……带来便利
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点评:句型可以写作原创办公和远程教育。
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解析:in more ways than one = in many aspects 在很多方面
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