2014年9月27日雅思写作新东方网薛鹏原创范文及解析:独立生活的利弊

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2014年9月27日雅思考试回忆
小作文:表格题:三个国家在2003, 2006 , 2009生产汽车的数量。
薛鹏点评:表格最难,因为信息可以短时间找不到规则,考表格,信息简单。
大作文:(根据VIP学员婉玉和赵航回忆准确翻译)
Recently years,more and more people choose to live by themselves,why? Is it positive or negative for the development of the society? 很多人选择独自生活,原因何在,对于社会的发展是有利还是有弊?
请对比小鹏哥小作文预测(前博文)
薛鹏展望:9月27日饼图和曲线图为一类重点,表格图和柱形图为二类重点。若考表格,信息不会很复杂。童鞋可以剑桥雅思5-9的真题为复习资源。
请对比小鹏哥大作文预测(前博文)
2014年9月27日雅思写作新东方网薛鹏预测
In some countries some school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time between finishing school and attending university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for school leavers' decision. Give your own opinion and reasons. Use your experience of life to explain it. 很多学生选择工作旅行一年再上大学,讨论间隔年的利弊。
点评:高中生离开家人去异国他乡旅行和工作的经历就是个人独自生活的经历,语料库融会贯通。
2014年9月20/27日雅思写作新东方网薛鹏预测
教育类:
Nowadays, sending children to a boarding
school is becoming increasingly popular. Why is this case? Do you
think it is a positive or negative
development?
点评:该题的提问角度和9月27日相同,先原因分析再利弊讨论。
小鹏哥推荐练笔题目(28题为雅思考试高频核心母题)
An amount of people today change their career and place of residence several times during their lives. Is this positive or negative to development?很多人在一生中不断改变自己的居住地以及工作,是好还是不好?
点评:年轻人改变居住地可以理解为离开父母,独自去大都市打拼和发展。
薛鹏解析独自生活:
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写作思路:先原因分析再利弊讨论
作家立场:独自生活利大于弊
思路拓展:
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薛鹏点评:雅思写作话题多和年轻人的成长相关,自由展开例证,忠实于自己的感情,容易打造感动自己,说服考官的范文。
薛鹏布局图:
首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 写作目的
二段:原因分析: 客观原因 +主观原因
三段:利好的展开:利好的展开以及细节的支持
四段:弊端的展开:利好的展开以及细节的支持
尾段:首次亮明作家立场
薛鹏原创范文赏析:
首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 写作目的
It seems that numerous young adults, especially those university leavers or newly married couple, are fond of renting an apartment or establishing own families rather than sharing the same house with their parents. For many years, people have been pondering the pros and cons of encouraging youngsters to live alone without reaching any definite consensus. This essay aims to endeavor to explore the reasons why living by oneself is so popular and then investigate its merits and demerits.
薛鹏解析:
university leavers 大学毕业生
live by oneself 独居
二段:独立生活的原因分析:
The most essential reason why some people like to live by themselves is that they deliberately chosen the lives they want to lead and are fully aware of the consequence, they dare to brave themselves only with a view of savoring free and self-supporting life that their hearts desire. Another reason is that many youngsters choose to pursue their academic or career dreams in strange cities and thus live away from their native hometown, in this sense, they have no alternative but to live on their own.
薛鹏解析:
Many youngsters choose to pursue their academic or career dreams in strange cities and thus live away from their native hometown, in this sense, they have no alternative but to live on their own.很多年轻人在异国或者他乡追求学业或者发展事业,因此,他们只能远离故土。
薛鹏拓展:
They deliberately chosen the lives they want to lead and are fully aware of the consequence, they dare to brave themselves only with a view of savoring the free and self-supporting life that their hearts desire 他们深思熟虑地选择了自己渴望的生活方式,并且,愿意承担一切,仅仅为品味渴望的自由和独立。
三段:利好的展开
To be sure, a
number of benefits could be gained by opting for free lifestyle.
The most glaring merit is that it is facile for young people to
enhance their independence and temper their viability via living by
themselves. More precisely, washing clothes, tidying up dorms and
tackling crisis by oneself are the basic abilities one needs for
his or her future life. Learning these skills at earlier age helps
those who are in the formative years to brave challenges later in
their lives. Another merit deriving from independent life is that
instead of living a stable and parasitic life in parents’
home, those who prefer to live on their own
could temper their interpersonal skills, money management,
adaptability and viability. For example, I used to live alone in
another city for short study time, I enjoyed that free and
challenging life.
薛鹏解析:
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薛鹏拓展:
Instead of enjoying a stable and parasitic life in parents’ home,a great many young adults, especially those cherish the dream of savoring the freedom, prefer to live on their own 没有过一种稳定和寄生虫一样的生活,很多的年轻人,尤其是哪些渴望自由的人,选择独自生活。
二段:独立生活的弊端的展开:
We have no reasons, however,
薛鹏解析:
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尾段:首次亮明作家立场
Overall, it is my stand living alone is a double-edged sword which can be used equally for good or evil, however, youngsters should be encouraged to temper their independence, viability and adaptability, choosing to face up to the challenges of living independently is one of the best strategies to obtain this objective.
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全文点评:
文本写作紧扣主题(Task Response);结构清晰(Coherence and Cohesion);文章连贯(Lexical Resource),语法多变和用词准确(Grammatical Range and Accuracy),可为考生赏析学习之佳作。背诵小鹏哥原创句型,写作融会贯通。11月2日雅思写作预测近期由新东方网雅思频道首发。