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2014年9月27日雅思写作新东方网薛鹏原创范文及解析:独立生活的利弊

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           2014年9月27日雅思写作新东方网薛鹏原创范文及解析:独立生活的利弊

 

2014927日雅思考试回忆

 

小作文:表格题:三个国家在200320062009生产汽车的数量。

 

薛鹏点评:表格最难,因为信息可以短时间找不到规则,考表格,信息简单。

 

大作文:(根据VIP学员婉玉和赵航回忆准确翻译)

 

Recently yearsmore and more people choose to live by themselveswhy? Is it positive or negative for the development of the society? 很多人选择独自生活,原因何在,对于社会的发展是有利还是有弊?

 

请对比小鹏哥小作文预测(前博文)

 

薛鹏展望:927日饼图和曲线图为一类重点,表格图和柱形图为二类重点。若考表格,信息不会很复杂。童鞋可以剑桥雅思5-9的真题为复习资源。

 

 

请对比小鹏哥大作文预测(前博文)

 

2014927日雅思写作新东方网薛鹏预测 15题)

 

In some countries some school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time between finishing school and attending university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for school leavers' decision. Give your own opinion and reasons. Use your experience of life to explain it. 很多学生选择工作旅行一年再上大学,讨论间隔年的利弊。

 

点评:高中生离开家人去异国他乡旅行和工作的经历就是个人独自生活的经历,语料库融会贯通。

 

2014920/27日雅思写作新东方网薛鹏预测 20题)

 

教育类:

 

Nowadays, sending children to a boarding school is becoming increasingly popular. Why is this case? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?  寄宿学校的原因以及利弊讨论?

 

点评:该题的提问角度和927日相同,先原因分析再利弊讨论。 

 

小鹏哥推荐练笔题目(28题为雅思考试高频核心母题) 


An amount of people today change their career and place of residence several times during their lives. Is this positive or negative to development?很多人在一生中不断改变自己的居住地以及工作,是好还是不好?

 

点评:年轻人改变居住地可以理解为离开父母,独自去大都市打拼和发展。

 

薛鹏解析独自生活:

 

1.        年轻人毕业后独自租房生活,不选择和父母生活在一起

2.        年轻人结婚独立生活,不选择和父母生活生活在一起


写作思路:先原因分析再利弊讨论

 

作家立场:独自生活利大于弊

 

思路拓展:

 

1.       很多年轻人追求自由,渴望独立,毕业后选择独自生活,例如哥哥保罗,利好很多,具体而言,锻炼了自己生存能力,洗服,做饭,理财,家务等能力,可以想象,生存能力的锻炼及独立性的培养,对于未来的职业发展有利好。

 

2.        年轻情侣组建家庭不和父母生活在一起,幸福感会更强,因为夫妻享受二人世界,减少了和老人的矛盾。吃饭为例,饮食习惯和生活习惯不同,矛盾难免如果两代人一起生活,各自独立生活,减少了老人照顾孩子的负担,年轻人也享受了更多婚姻生活的自由。

 

薛鹏点评:雅思写作话题多和年轻人的成长相关,自由展开例证,忠实于自己的感情,容易打造感动自己,说服考官的范文。

 

薛鹏布局图:

 

首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 写作目的

二段:原因分析: 客观原因 +主观原因

三段:利好的展开:利好的展开以及细节的支持

四段:弊端的展开:利好的展开以及细节的支持

尾段:首次亮明作家立场

 

薛鹏原创范文赏析:

 

首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 写作目的


It seems that numerous young adults, especially those university leavers or newly married couple, are fond of renting an apartment or establishing own families rather than sharing the same house with their parents. For many years people have been pondering the pros and cons of encouraging youngsters to live alone without reaching any definite consensus. This essay aims to endeavor to explore the reasons why living by oneself is so popular and then investigate its merits and demerits.


薛鹏解析:


university leavers 大学毕业生

live by oneself 独居

 

二段:独立生活的原因分析:


The most essential reason why some people like to live by themselves is that they deliberately chosen the lives they want to lead and are fully aware of the consequence, they dare to brave themselves only with a view of savoring free and self-supporting life that their hearts desire. Another reason is that many youngsters choose to pursue their academic or career dreams in strange cities and thus live away from their native hometown, in this sense, they have no alternative but to live on their own.

 

 

薛鹏解析:

Many youngsters choose to pursue their academic or career dreams in strange cities and thus live away from their native hometown, in this sense, they have no alternative but to live on their own.很多年轻人在异国或者他乡追求学业或者发展事业,因此,他们只能远离故土。

 

薛鹏拓展:

They deliberately chosen the lives they want to lead and are fully aware of the consequence, they dare to brave themselves only with a view of savoring the free and self-supporting life that their hearts desire 他们深思熟虑地选择了自己渴望的生活方式,并且,愿意承担一切,仅仅为品味渴望的自由和独立。

 

 

三段:利好的展开


To be sure, a number of benefits could be gained by opting for free lifestyle. The most glaring merit is that it is facile for young people to enhance their independence and temper their viability via living by themselves. More precisely, washing clothes, tidying up dorms and tackling crisis by oneself are the basic abilities one needs for his or her future life. Learning these skills at earlier age helps those who are in the formative years to brave challenges later in their lives. Another merit deriving from independent life is that instead of living a stable and parasitic life in parents’ home those who prefer to live on their own could temper their interpersonal skills, money management, adaptability and viability. For example, I used to live alone in another city for short study time, I enjoyed that free and challenging life. 


薛鹏解析:


1.     Those who are in the formative years 成长中的年轻人

2.      Instead of living a stable and parasitic life in parents’ homethose who prefer to live on their own could harmonize their marriage life, train their money management, adaptability and viability.  没有过一种稳定和寄生虫一样的生活,选择独立生活的人可以和谐婚姻生活,锻炼理财能力,适应能力,生存能力。

 

 

薛鹏拓展:


Instead of enjoying a stable and parasitic life in parents’ homea great many young adults, especially those cherish the dream of savoring the freedom, prefer to live on their own 没有过一种稳定和寄生虫一样的生活,很多的年轻人,尤其是哪些渴望自由的人,选择独自生活。

 

二段:独立生活的弊端的展开:


We have no reasons however,  to ignore the downsides triggered by separating from parents. First, some youngsters may easily lead a disordered or unwholesome life without sufficient care from their parents. To illustrate, most of the adults who pick up the adverse habits of playing on-line gamesengorgementoverwork have experience of living by themselves. Also, there is a danger of the decomposition of family bonds if youngsters live far away from homes for a long time. 

 

薛鹏解析:

 

1.    pick up the adverse habits of playing on-line gamesengorgementoverwork 养成沉迷于游戏,暴饮暴食,过度劳累的习惯

2.     the decomposition of family bonds 家庭纽带的分解

 

尾段:首次亮明作家立场


Overall, it is my stand living alone is a double-edged sword which can be used equally for good or evil, however, youngsters should be encouraged to temper their independence, viability and adaptability, choosing to face up to the challenges of living independently is one of the best strategies to obtain this objective.


薛鹏解析:


1.        is a double-edged sword which can be used equally for good or evil 是一把双刃刀,有利有弊

2.        temper their independence, viability and adaptability 独立他们的独立性,生存能力和适应能力

3.        is one of the best strategies to obtain this objective 是最好的策略之一实现这个目标

 

全文点评:


文本写作紧扣主题(Task Response);结构清晰(Coherence and Cohesion);文章连贯(Lexical Resource),语法多变和用词准确(Grammatical Range and Accuracy),可为考生赏析学习之佳作。背诵小鹏哥原创句型,写作融会贯通。112日雅思写作预测近期由新东方网雅思频道首发。

 

 

 

 



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