2014年9月20日雅思写作新东方网薛鹏原创范文：政府科教兴国

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2014年9月20日雅思题目：

小作文：地图题： 一条河两侧建筑在1980年和现在变化的对比

大作文：

In developing countries, some people think the government should introduce new technology to people in order to improve quality of life, while others believe governments should offer free education. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

 

相关题目：

Some people think that introducing new technology can improve people's quality of life in the developing countries. However, others believe that free education should be offered. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. （2009年11月19日）

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6724EN00SIGG.gif 薛鹏感言：雅思题库题目过千，茫茫题海，原题压中的机会较小，但是写作思路和语料库拓展可以融会贯通，今日考题为科技类，教育类，政府类综合考察，背诵过小鹏哥语料库的童鞋只要可以灵活地头脑风暴，自圆其说，用小鹏哥预测题目的语料库定可才艺展示，博取高分。

 

作家立场：普及免费教育以及依赖科技革新都是改善人们生活质量的方式，两者应该完美结合。

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6724EN00SIGG.gif小鹏哥布局图：

首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点（可以省略）+ 作家立场

二段：为何科技可以改善人们生活，提高生活质量（细节以及例证展开）

三段：为何教育可以改善人们生活，提高生活质量（细节以及例证展开）

尾段：再次亮明观点 + 总结理由：

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6724EN00SIGG.gif小鹏哥思路拓展：

 

高科技改善人民生活质量的论据以及细节为：

（1）飞机旅行给人们出行带来便利，对于国家的商贸旅游有利好，国家富足，生活质量改善。

（2）普及互联网可以拓宽人们的精神视野，带来心灵愉悦，例如，穷人亦可以通过网络浏览美术馆和艺术馆的精湛艺术品。

（3）普及智能手机可以便利交流，获得信息，辅助教育，甜美生活。

 

普及教育可以改善人民的生活质量在于：

（1）普及免费教育对于来自偏远地区的贫困儿童意义重大，可以帮助他们摆脱贫困，改变命运。

 

（2）普及免费教育可以培养更多大学生，对于国家而言，提高国民基本素质，为国家发展注入新鲜活力，对于个人，专业上精通，精神上受益，为未来的事业辉煌，美满婚姻打下坚实基础，因此，普及教育有助于提高个人生活质量。

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6724EN00SIGG.gif 薛鹏原创范文赏析：

 

首段：背景介绍 + 作家立场：

 

The government, as a decision-maker, is the representative of citizen’s basic interests. In this sense, every governmental policy will inevitably exert a profound influence on its citizens’ quality of life and further prosperity of the nation. People have been debating for years the function of a good government, as I see it, both introducing innovative high-tech products and popularizing free education fall into the category of the governmental function.

薛鹏解析：

1.        exert a profound influence on ……对于……施加深远影响

2.        fall into the category of…… 归属于……的范畴

二段：正方观点的展开：为何政府要依赖科技改善人民的生活质量：

The reasons why developing high-tech products could conduce to the amelioration of a nation’s population lies in three main aspects. Primarily, prospering aviation can, to large extent optimize people’s quality of life, for development the international trade makes citizens have access to various seasoned fruits and vegetables, likewise, the prosperity of international tourism enables people to improve the quality of their lives by touring many hot scenic spots with their families, pursuing academic dreams overseas and thus enjoy more leisure activities or embrace more personal success. Also, the betterment of people’s life depends on the popularity of the Internet and the mobile phone, specifically, the cell phone greatly strengthens the family tie and diversifies people’s entertainment. Similarly, with availability of the Internet, more and more citizens can embark on self-employment by drawing on e-commerce or receiving education at home. (139)

薛鹏解析：

1.  tour many hot scenic spots 参观热门旅游景区

2.  strengthen the family tie 加强家庭联系

3.  embark on self-employment by drawing on e-commerce 通过电子商务自我创业

二段：反方观点的展开：为何政府要教育改善人民的生活质量：

Education is one of the key words of our time. A man without an education, many of us believe, is an unfortunate victim of adverse circumstances, deprived of one of the golden chances, in this sense, supporting free education has an indispensable role to play in terms of perfecting people’s quality of life. For a start，those poverty-stricken children from the rural areas could become the beneficiaries of free education, it is highly possible that a man receiving fine education can shake off poverty and then revolutionize his or her destiny. Further, a nation could benefit from the promotion of free education, surely, talents inject new vitality into the mightiness of a country, the increased happiness index of citizen will ensue when a nation become stronger and richer.   （128） 

薛鹏解析：

1.    Education is one of the key words of our time. A man without an education, many of us believe, is an unfortunate victim of adverse circumstances, deprived of one of the golden chances. 教育是我们时代的关键词，一个人没有受过教育，是逆境的牺牲品，被剥夺了最珍贵的机会。

2.    shake off poverty and then revolutionize his or her destiny  摆脱贫困，改变命运

3.   inject new vitality into the mightiness of a country 为国家的强大注入新鲜活力

 

 

尾段：再次亮明观点：

Overall，I re-affirm my stand that a nation can rejuvenate through science and education，to optimize people's quality of life, efforts should be made the government in terms of high-tech innovation and universal education.(35)

 

薛鹏解析：

1.a nation can rejuvenate through science and education 科技兴国

2.efforts should be made the government  政府应该努力

3.in terms of  在……方面

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6724EN00SIGG.gif 小鹏哥创作感言：写作已超越模板，思维锋利如刀，语料信手捏来，因为素养是千锤百炼。写作是辛苦的，因为难以超越自己；写作是快乐的，因为享受表达的乐趣。

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6724EN00SIGG.gif小鹏哥创作寄语：夜已深，为官网写作考试周报是对于梦想的坚持，是回报新东方的厚爱，更是为照亮烤鸭前行之路，烤鸭之路很艰难，但是我们要有坚信。有梦想的人是快乐的，坚持梦想的人是幸福的。因为，我们想象中的美一定可以擦去心中的泪，梦是宝贝。

 

Tip：9月27日雅思写作预测调整版近期由新东方网雅思频道首发。

 

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作者简介：

薛鹏：雅思小鹏哥，新东方网雅思频道托福频道专栏作家。