2014年7月19日雅思写作新东方薛鹏解析以及原创范文

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http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif小鹏哥发言：7月19日雅思写作新东方薛鹏解析由新东方网雅思频道第一时间首发，欢迎关注，阅读，转载。

 

 

7月19日：雅思小作文：流程图：

 

7月19日：雅思大作文：健康类：（遗漏话题；旧题改写）

 

Some people believe that the government have the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet，while others believe it is individuals' responsibility to care for their diet and health？Discuss both sides and give your opinion？有人认为政府有责任保障公民有健康饮食，有人认为个人有责任关注个人饮食和健康，讨论两种观点，给出你的意见？

 

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif 薛鹏老师寄语：小鹏哥原创语料库来之经年累月的对于国外考试阅读的专研以及对于外教文章的海量研读，语言地道严谨，多多背诵，阅读同步提高，写作驾轻就熟，在雅思培训鱼龙混杂，名师云集，唯利是图的当下，小鹏哥沉静心态，专注创作，以开放的胸怀分享优质的原创资源。

 

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif新东方网雅思频道薛鹏原创语料库：

 

1.        lead a disciplined life v过一种有规律的生活

2.        maintain healthy = keep fit v保持健康

3.        health-enhancing adj 改善健康的：

4.        You are what you eat: 人类要吃得健康，以保重健康身体.

5.        enhance people’s  health index v提高健康指数

 

6.        avoid the intake of carbonated beverage v 避免碳酸饮料的摄入

7.        wholesome = healthy = sound  adj 健康的

8.        The country will benefit because energetic citizens will inject new life into the further development of nation.  国家会受益，因为精力充沛的公民会为国家发展注入新鲜活力（健康饮食对于国家的利好）

9.        draw on v利用……（推荐使用）

10.    ……have a balanced diet  v 饮食平衡

 

11.    ……is high in nutritional value v 营养价值高

12.    strengthen one’ s immune system v 提高免疫力

13.    be accountable for = be responsible for 对于……负责

14.    The responsibility should be given to……责任归结给……（8分作文语料库）

15.    Health is to every individual what air is to the earth. 健康对于人好像空气对于地球；

16.    keeping fit could instill confidence into one’s heart v保持健康有助于树立自信（复习）

17.    The increased awareness of healthier lifestyle has made plenteous modern people alter their adverse dietary habits and render more concerns over their personal health. 渐渐认识到健康的生活方式的重要性，很多现代人改变了他们不量的饮食习惯，更加注重个人健康。

 

 

新东方网雅思频道薛鹏原创范文：（请尊重原创；转载标注）

 

首段：背景介绍 + 作家立场：

 

To lead a wholesome and active life might be the dream of every individual, unfortunately, busy pace of modern life sometimes deprives us of personal health. Happiness lies, first of all, in health. Health enables us to brave career challenges and harmonize family life. This essay aims to prove that a healthy diet derives from the concerted made by both the government and  everyone

 

二段：谈及政府如何保障人们的健康饮食

 

TV commercials and various ads are the underlying reasons of unhealthy dietary habit. After watching different vivid food ads on fast-foods, fried foods and carbonated beverage, unwise consumers will unavoidably be swayed by those negative propagandas. Imaginably, too much eating of cheese, ice cream, salty snacks and meat is physically detrimental. By that I mean, obesity or over-nutrition are now agonizing many families. Hence, it is the unshakable obligation of the government to ensure its citizens’ health. To illustrate, American government had formulated policies restricting the bundle sales of fast foods aiming at children. New Zealand government had enacted legislations imposing a heavy tax upon alcohol buyers and cigarette purchasers.

 

 

薛鹏点评：American government had formulated policies restricting the bundle sales of fast foods aiming at children. 美国政府立法禁止销售针儿童捆绑销售快餐：

 

薛鹏点评：New Zealand government had enacted legislations imposing a heavy tax upon alcohol buyers or cigarette purchasers . 新西兰政府对于烟酒消费者加大收税力度：

 

 

三段：从饮食和锻炼角度谈及对于健康的利好：

 

Nonetheless, the increased awareness of healthier lifestyle has made plenteous modern people alter their adverse dietary habits and render more concerns over their personal health. Principally, I myself  usually eat a lot of fresh fruits and vegetables. As a great-believer of the saying, “you are what you eat”, I,  in most cases, try to avoid too much intake of high fat, sugar and calorie so that my good health can be ensured. After all, it is a hard truth that fruits and vegetables are high in nutritional value because they contain various beneficial vitamins. Likewise, doing some regular physical exercise is a must in the interests of our health. People can easily strengthen their immune system and thus enhance their health index. More precisely, taking up various physical exercises help players relieve their strains and relax their moods. A reportage is persuasive enough to support my point. The scientific research conducted by top medical organizations has found that if a person can do corporal exercises one hour per day, then, it is likely that he could cope with career tasks at least fifty years and enjoy prolonged lifespan.   

 

尾段：再次亮明观点：健康需要政府和个人的协同努力：

 

People suffer from a variety of health-related problems at times, however careful they are of their health. To make sure that we remain as healthy as possible, joint efforts have to be made by the government and most importantly ourselves.

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif 薛鹏全文点评：文无定法，小鹏哥原创范文只是雅思写作之一种。本文摒弃模板，自由写作。主题明确，逻辑清晰，论证饱满，词汇亮点，句法多变。大量语料库来着阅读，应该是7.5分以上的高分范文。

 

 

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      作者简介：

      雅思小鹏哥-薛鹏，吉林大学外国语言学及应用语言学硕士。17年英语教学经验 (7年新东方雅思托福SAT教学经历)，新东方功勋教师，新东方网雅思频道专栏作家，多次培训出雅思和托福高分学员(雅思7.5分，托福29分)。

　　爱生活，爱运动，爱音乐电影，爱旅行美食，爱读书摄影，更爱英语教学。20岁登上英语讲台，主讲英语万词速记课程。熟悉 GRE、TOEFL、SAT、TEM、CET 等各级别词汇教学。

　　大一时即在报刊杂志上主持“英语学习系列谈”以及“薛鹏教你学单词”等专栏。2006年获得“外研社/朗文杯”新概念背诵大赛吉林省赛区大学成人组冠军，全国总决赛大学成人组二等奖。

　　对于各类写作课程有精深研究，授课方式行云流水，妙语连珠，知识底蕴深厚，对学员极具有启迪性和激励性。

　　教学理念：Education is not the filling of a pail but the lighting of a fire.(教育不是注满一桶水，而是点燃一把火)