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2014年7月10日雅思写作新东方薛鹏解析以及原创范文

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                   2014年7月10日雅思写作新东方薛鹏解析以及原创范文


感谢黄小超的画图以及分享(新通外语李雅斯转载的时候居然PS掉小超的名字,新通外语不断抄袭小鹏哥和各位老师的原创预测和语料库,令人鄙视)

 

Task two:

Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athletes instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?有人认为训练专业的体育运动员比提供人人可以使用的体育设施更能帮助国家取得成功,你认为这个观点是积极的还是消极的?

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif 新东方薛鹏解析:7月10日雅思写作小作文再次考察流程图,出乎意料。属于新题出现,在世界杯和国家举办奥运会的大背景下提出,也算与时俱进。雅思考试出过的类似题目有国家举办体育比赛的利弊。

 

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif 雅思写作困境:


1.  没有思路

2.  没有语言

3.  表达不精彩:

 

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif 解决策略:精彩的语料库的输入转为精彩的语料库的输出:

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif  雅思写作经典提问方式:

 

1.        利弊讨论

2.        两边讨论

3.        是否同意一种观点

4.        分析问题以及解决问题;

 

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif 新东方薛鹏解析:该文需要论证的是国家培养专业运动员的利弊:主题观点即可写作利大于弊,也可以写作弊大于利。

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif 雅思考试题库类似题目:

The Olympic Games or the world up football game is a major international sporting event and the opportunity to host this event is keenly contested by many counties. In your opinion, what are the major benefits and drawbacks of hosting an international sporting event such as the Olympic Games?

 

 

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif 新东方薛鹏利弊讨论话题布局图:


首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

二段:利好的展开(必须要有细节的展开和解释)

三段:弊端的展开(必须要有细节的展开和解释)

尾段:再次亮明观点+ 谈及如何克服弊端:

 

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif 新东方薛鹏思路拓展:he mm cc street

 

1.        健康: 专业运动员的成功即为竞技体育事业的成功,这可以提高全民健身的热情,提高国民的基本素质以及健康的指数。

2.        教育:竞技对于民众有教育指导的意义,例如专业运动员传递了自我超越和追求完美的精神。

3.        金钱:培养专业运动员使国家成为体育强国,提高国家影响了,这就是一个很好的盈利的契机。例如,体育强国可以承办国际体育比赛,增加门票收入,纪念品销售,旅游收入,吸引赞助商。

4.        金钱:培养专业运动员是奢侈的行为,我们有更加紧迫的民生问题政府要优先考虑,有限的资源和无限的民生社会需求是矛盾的。(反对立场;反对国家投资的万能理由);同时,普及推广民众体育设施可以为更多普通人的健身提供良好的契机。

5.        文化交流:文化的多元性以及各国的交流 (支持奥运会)

6.        心理: 竞技体育的成功(运动员的成功)可以激发爱国热情以及增强民族的自豪感。

 

 

 

http://www/uc/myshow/blog/misc/gif/E___6831EN00SIGG.gif 雅思小鹏哥原创经典语料库:(推荐背诵)

 

1.      to ease people’s patriotic emotion v缓解爱国情绪(对于主办国的民众的利好)

词汇:patriotic 爱国的;patriot 爱国者

 

2.      to strengthen the national pride and sense of unity 加强了国民的自豪感和团结(利好)

词汇: unity 团结

 

3.      to enhance the host country’s reputation in the international arena  提高了一个国家的美誉度。(古老建筑可以提高城市的美誉度)

词汇:social status = social position 社会地位;international arena = international stage 国际舞台

 

记忆:a + ren (人) + a = arena 竞技场;

 

4.      attract global interest and attention v吸引了全球的兴趣和关注(支持)

 

5.      Hosting the international sports events is a wonderful opportunity to ease one’s patriotic emotion and strengthen one’s national pride and solidarity. 是很好的机会缓解爱国情绪,以及增强民族自豪感和团结。

 

6.      kindle and stimulate the citizens’ passion of building up physique and thus enhance people’s health index and promote the basic quality of a nation’s population. 全面健身的热情,提高国民的基本素质以及健康的指数。

 

7.      Preparations are extremely time-consuming and energy-consuming 非常浪费时间和浪费资源

 

8.      to bid for the international sports events 申办国际体育比赛

 

9.      will impose much pressure upon a nation economically 增加国家的经济压力

 

 

薛鹏词汇5000范文赏析之国家培养专业运动员的利弊(7.12)

 

Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athletes instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? 有人认为训练专业的体育运动员比提供人人可以使用的体育设施更能帮助国家取得成功,你认为这个观点是积极的还是消极的? (2014年7月10日雅思写作)

 

点评:本文主题考察的是国家培养专业运动员的利弊:

 

解析:7月10日雅思写作小作文再次考察流程图,出乎意料。属于新题出现,在世界杯和国家举办奥运会的大背景下提出,也算与时俱进。雅思考试出过的类似题目有国家举办体育比赛的利弊。

 

雅思考试题库类似题目:(旧题)

 

The Olympic Games or the world up football game is a major international sporting event and the opportunity to host this event is keenly contested by many counties. In your opinion, what are the major benefits and drawbacks of hosting an international sporting event such as the Olympic Games? 国家举办体育比赛的利弊?

 

利弊讨论话题布局图:

 

首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

二段:利好的展开(必须要有细节的展开和解释)

三段:弊端的展开(必须要有细节的展开和解释)

尾段:再次亮明观点+ 谈及如何克服弊端:

 

新东方薛鹏原创范文:

 

首段:背景介绍 (个性开篇) + 争议焦点(句型引导)+作家立场(清晰表明)

 

To become mighty country in terms of sports events is what many nations aspire after. That is reason why numerous countries are keen on cultivating elite sportsman. However, conflicting ideas clash in determining whether or not to foster professional sportsman is superior to proffering sports facilities for common people. Personally speaking, the merits of zeroing in on the cultivation of athletes outweigh its demerits, although popularizing sports facilities is never without its virtues. (73)

 

翻译:成为竞技体育强国是很多国家渴望的,这就是为什么很多国家热衷于培养精英运动员。然而,人们一直在争议是否培养专业运动员优越于普及民众可以利用的体育设施。我认为,培养运动员利大于弊,尽管普及体育设施不是没有其利好。

新东方薛鹏原创语料库点评:(推荐背诵使用)

 

1. in terms of 在……方面:(考官词汇)

2. …… is what many nations aspire after. ……是很多国家渴望的;(首段推荐句型)

3. are keen on doing sth v 热衷于做……(喜欢的升级表达)

4. A is superior to B: A优越于B (is better than 的升级表达)

5. proffering sports facilities v 提供体育设施

解析:proffer = provide v 提供

6. zero in on the cultivation of athletes v 专注于培养运动员

解析:zero in on 专注于……

7. …… is never without its virtues. ……不是没有其利好:(双重否定表达肯定)

 

二段:国家培养专业体育运动的利好展开(三点理由)

 

Firstseen from positive aspect, to nurture more exceptional professional players is a golden chance of improving a nation’s status in the international arena and thus achieve economic profitability. By that I mean, a nation with great competiveness in sports events stand more opportunities of biding for international sports undertaking such as Olympic Games or the World Cup. The possible profit generated by the sale of TV rights, accommodations, ticket sales and visitor expenditure could generate immense economic value. Also, the triumph of professional athletes, to some extent, equals to the achievement of sports events career, which could fire people’s enthusiasm of building up bodies and thus enhance the basic quality of a nation’s population. Last, the self-made spirit of those sportsmen’s has a key role to play in educating and inspiring the general public. For instance, I am often strongly inspired by athletes’ relentless pursuit of perfection and ceaseless self-improvement. (142)

 

翻译:第一,从积极角度看,培养专业运动员使国家成为体育强国,这是一个很好的提高国际影响力以及盈利的契机。例如,体育强国可以承办国际体育比赛,增加门票收入,纪念品销售,旅游收入,吸引赞助商。第二,专业运动员的成功即为竞技体育事业的成功,这可以提高全民健身的热情,提高国民的基本素质以及健康的指数。第三,竞技对于民众有教育指导的意义,例如,我自己常常被专业运动员自我超越和追求完美的精神所感动。

 

新东方薛鹏原创语料库点评:(推荐背诵)

 

1. seen from positive aspect v 从积极的角度看 (引导利好)

 

2. nurture = foster = nurture = cultivate = develop = train v 培养……

 

3. exceptional professional players 优秀的职业运动员

 

词汇:exceptional = extraordinary = eminent = highly qualified adj 优秀的

 

4. ……is a golden chance of doing sth 是……的一个黄金的机会

 

5. a nation’s status in the international arena 在国际舞台的地位

 

6. achieve economic profitability v 盈利(来着雅思阅读)

 

7. stand more opportunities of doing sth 有更多的机会做……

 

8. bid for international sports undertaking v申办国际体育比赛

 

解析:undertaking 含有风险性的事业:

 

9. generate immense economic value. 带来巨大的经济价值(推荐背诵;赚钱的升级写法)

 

10. fire people’s enthusiasm of building up bodies v 点燃民众的健身热情

 

11. enhance the basic quality of a nation’s population. v提高国民的基本素质(国家给教育和医疗买单的利好)

 

12. the self-made spirit n自我奋斗精神

 

13. …… has a key role to play in …… 可以发挥重要作用

 

14. relentless pursuit of perfection 不懈追求完美

 

15. ceaseless self-improvement 不断的自我提高

 

三段:国家培养专业运动的弊端 + 普及民众体育设施的利好:

 

Granted, there is no garden without weeds. Excessive investment in training professional sportsmen might make the money fly, after all, we have more pressing social problems that need support from the public purse such as popularizing free education or ameliorating medical care. An argument might be hold by some people is that to provide common people with more sports facilities could create more possibilities of enhancing the heath index amongst the general public. By contrast, professional sports facilities could only serve small group of people. (84)

 

翻译:的确,没有不长杂草的花园,(凡事有利弊),在培养运动员方面过度投资等于浪费金钱。毕竟,我们有更加紧迫的民生问题需要来自国库的财政支持例如教育和医疗。同时,很多人也会认为,普及推广民众体育设施可以为更多普通人的健身提供良好的契机,相反,运动员使用的专业体育设施只有少数人才能使用。

 

新东方薛鹏原创语料库总结:(推荐背诵)

 

1. might make the money fly v 等于浪费金钱(反对政府投资政策)

 

2. financial support from the public purse 来自国家的财政支持(来自雅思阅读)

 

3. popularize free education v普及免费教育

 

4. ameliorate medical care v 改善医疗

 

5. create more possibilities of doing sth v 创造更多的…… 的可能性;

 

6. enhance the heath index amongst the general public. v 提高民众的健康指数

 

尾段:再次亮明观点 + 总结理由:

 

My stand is that to train a large proportion of athletes enjoys many visible virtues such as educating the public, kindling people’s zeal of doing physical exercises and enhancing a nation’s international influence.(33)

 

翻译:我的立场是培养专业运动员利好很多,例如对于公众的教育意义,点燃民众建设热情,提高国家的国际地位。

 

原创语料库点评:

 

1. a large proportion of 大量的

 

2. kindling people’s zeal of 点燃热情

 

全文点评:

 

文无定法;小鹏哥范文只是范文写作之一种;该文自由写作;淡化模板;主题明确;论证饱满;词汇变化;句型多样;用到许多的雅思阅读以及考官常用的词汇;词汇句法来着我多年的词汇教学和阅读教学积累。

 

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