2011年3月12日雅思大作文第一时间评析

文/上海新东方学校 樊黎明

【考试题目】

Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. How doe competitiveness affect individuals? Is it a positive or negative quality? 

【题目翻译】

竞争力在绝大多数社会都是人们的一个积极的品质。竞争力如何影响个人？这是一个积极的还是消极的品质？

【关键词分析】

1.    competitiveness  n. 竞争力，同义替换competitive edge，这个词与competition（竞争）是不一样的，前者是表示人或者国家的一种竞争能力，而第二个是社会中存在的一种竞争现象。不过在写法上不用太在意这两者的差别。

2.    individuals   注意这道题目的第一问一定是围绕竞争力对个人的影响，不要讲到对公司、对社会的影响。第二问的问的是对competitiveness的评价，并非一定要围绕个人。

【话题分类与题型】

本题是新题，仍为“老题新出”，属于抽象类话题，题型为混合题型Combo（即前半问属于PRR (Report)，后半问属于Discursive (Argumentation) 。

【话题评价】
这个题目与03年8月2日的题目类似，而该题目已经收录到《剑桥雅思真题集》5中。在很多考生眼里看来，抽象类题是雅思写作中最难下笔的话题，因为很难与现实生活联系到一起。但其实抽象类类话题反而是最容易构思论点的话题，就是因为它可以和其它话题结合一起，变成相关的具体话题：比如把工作生活类话题结合，就可以变成在工作场所workplace中竞争的好处和坏处；与教育类结合：竞争对儿童及青少年的好处和坏处。

同学们不妨思考一下另外一个抽象类话题，看看可以和哪些话题结合？Many people are optimistic about the 21st century and see it as an opportunity to make positive changes to the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with their optimism? What changes would you like to see in the new century? (090723)

【类似真题】

1.   Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your opinion. (030802, 剑5 Test 3)

2.   Sports encourage competition rather than cooperation. Therefore, sports should not be encouraged at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? （V87，远古级考题）

【结构与思路】

本题是Combo题型，自然按照题目的要求来进行分段就可以了。全文可以分四段或者五段，正文的第一段讲竞争力对个人的影响，可以从教育和工作等方面去讲，然后下面的1-2段可以讲竞争力的好处和坏处。

【相关范文】

Sports encourage competition rather than cooperation. Therefore, sports should not be encouraged at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? 

Sports enrich students’ campus life and energize their physiques. Faced with immense pressure from work and study, more and more people begin to realize the importance of physical training. However, there is a heated debate over whether sports should be encouraged in school. As for me, I cannot see any contradiction between cooperation and competition.

On the one hand, competition is the driving force of social progress. Without exception, the development of athletics attributes mainly to the competition in sports. Competition, the motivation of athletic development, not only stimulates athletes’ desire for winning a game, but also entertains the audience. If there is no competition in sports, NBA games, for instance, will not be that attractive and exciting.

On the other hand, competition is not the decisive factor to win a game. Some sports games such as football, basketball and boat racing require cooperation, and without which, some athletes and sports stars will not be so brilliant. The World Cup gives us a very convincing illustration. Soccer, an overwhelming team game in the world, implies both fantastic individual skills and good cooperation between the players. Therefore, sports can cultivate pupils’ team spirit and strengthen unity of a class.

To sum up, competition does not result in hatred between rivalries as expected. On the contrary, it plays a very active role in the building-up of friendship and the relationship between the people from different races, religions, cultures and political backgrounds. Personally, I advocate the encouragement of sports at school because sports benefit students both physically and psychologically. (256 words)

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