雅思流程图《巧克力的制作》(含范文深度点评)

标签:
雅思写作流程图范文教育 |
分类: 写作范文 |
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
Write at least 150 words.
【高分范文及深度点评】
The diagram shows the stages in the process of making chocolate.【所有的小作文第一句话都要用一般现在时。流程图必备三个词:process:整个过程, stage:阶段,step:步骤】
Chocolate comes from the cacao
tree, which is grown in parts of
South America, Africa and Indonesia.【开头不能冲上来就直接介绍cacao tree,而是通过主题词chocolate引出,否则显得太唐突】【流程图特点之一:介绍过程要使用一般现在时】【流程图特点之二:大量使用定语从句,将有关联的两句话连接。】【流程图特点之三:大量使用被动语态】The tree
produces large red pods which contain white cocoa
beans.
Next, the brown
beans are spread
in the sun to dry. They are then
put in large
sacks and transported by train or lorry. After this, the
beans are taken to a chocolate factory where they are roasted
in
an oven at temperatures of between 250
and 350 degree Celsius.
After being roasted, the beans are crushed and the outer shell is removed. This part is not needed for making chocolate. Finally, the inner part of the bean is pressed and liquid chocolate is produced.
【流程图特点之六:一般不需要写总结】
最后再总结一下流程图的特点:
特点一:现在时
特点二:定语从句
特点三:被动语态
特点四:顺序词
特点五:适当添加
特点六:无总结