钟琬婷两篇新托福模拟考试满分作文

By Zhongwanting (Helen)

 2005年暑假我在 http://toeflpractice.ets.org/ 上做了一次新托福模拟考试，听力、阅读、写作都得了满分。下面就是这次模拟考试写作部分的两篇满分作文，供大家交流。

第一篇作文：

New findings in scientific areas can examine and challenge previous assumptions. A recent finding concerning the meerkat, a burrow-dwelling animal in the African grasslands, has cast doubt upon the conventional ideas of altruism, the type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interests for the benefit of another.

Meerkats were previously thought to be a typical altruistic animal. When the other meerkats feed, there is usually one meerkat watching out for predators. The sentinel meerkat gains nothing, it seems, for it can neither eat nor escape quickly and successfully after raising an alarm.

However, in the new findings, it's shown that the sentinel meerkat has already eaten food before standing guard, thus contradicting the thought that it has an empty belly while on the lookout. In addition to this, the sentinel is the first to see a predator, so it is the first to escape. It is also placed nearest a burrow, making it relatively easier to flee. Moreover, its alarm calls may cause the group either to gather or to spread rapidly, which may attract the predator's attention, providing the sentinel a better chance to escape.

The same is with supposed human altruistic behavior. Organ donation to strangers may be considered an unselfish act, which provides little reward to the donator. However, by donating his organ, the donator may most probably receive praise and appreciation from others. Isn't this non-material reward, which increases one's self worth, satisfactory to anyone?

第二篇作文： 

［  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

      Good teachers are more important to a child's development than good parents.  ］

Parents and teachers are both important people to a child. Some people say, `Good teachers are more important to a child's development than good parents.' However, I do not agree with this statement.

'Parents are the first educators of a child.' Indeed, when a person is born into this world, the first people he is in contact with everyday are his parents, whereas a teacher can only come during a later stage in the child's life, and may leave him after just a few years.All through the child's childhood and puberty, parents insert a subtle influence on him, teaching him what to look up to and what to become.

In the early years of a child's life, his parents are the ones to teach him the basics of life and the principals of living. They are the ones to teach him how to pronounce the first word, how to stand up and take a few steps, how to greet elders, and in the process of which, they give him the first glimpse of life----how learning, strength of character and etiquette are essential to one person. These are what my father and mother taught me when I was too young to go to school.

Good parents set a good example for a child to abide by, whereas bad parents usually do not have well-behaving children. Isn't it said, 'Like father, like son'? Parents are the first people a child learns to respect, because they are his guardians, his elders tied by blood. Being a good parent doesn't necessarily mean that he or she must be knowledgable, or must be able to speak big, wise words that may be difficult to understand. If a parent can teach the child how to behave by behaving himself, he is a good parent even if he is illiterate, or is poor. Thus, a child's character is usually shaped and molded before he attends school under the influence of his parents, and that is more than a good teacher can do to the child with the bearings of knowledge.

Good parents are essential to a child's development in that they are the first ever to teach him and that what they deliver is more about life and spirit than knowledge. What they can do is more than what a good teacher can. It suffices to say that good parents are the most important people to a child's development, and not good teachers.

       广东实验中学  初二（1）班  钟琬婷

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新托福模拟考试满分作文之一

 科学领域内新的发现可以用来检验和挑战以前的假设。最近，人们在研究生活在非洲草原上的海岛猫鼬时发现，这种穴居动物并不像人们以前所认为的那样具有无私的精神，为了其他伙伴的利益而勇于牺牲自己的利益。

 海岛猫鼬曾经被人们认为是一种典型的具有无私精神的动物。当它们进食时，通常会有一只海岛猫鼬在为大家望风，以防受到捕食者的袭击。充当哨兵的海岛猫鼬似乎从中得不到任何好处，因为它既不能进食，也不能在发出一个警报之后迅速而又成功地逃脱。

 但是，新的发现表明，充当哨兵的海岛猫鼬在站岗之前已经进过食了，因此这与人们先前所持的海岛猫鼬空腹站岗的说法相悖。此外，这个哨兵第一个发现敌人，所以它也是第一个逃命者；而且岗哨还设置在距离洞穴最近的地点，所以逃脱起来也更加容易。更有甚者，哨兵发出的警报可能还会使正在进食的海岛猫鼬群出现瞬间混乱状态，这也会吸引捕食者的注意，从而为哨兵的逃脱提供了更好的机会。

    人类的所谓无私行为也是如此。那种无偿为陌生人捐献器官的行为可以被人们认为是一种无私行为，但是捐献者很可能因此而受到人们的赞扬，难道这不是提高了捐献者的价值，使其感到满足的一种非物质性回报吗？

新托福模拟考试满分作文之二

［  你对下面的说法同意还是不同意？

    对于孩子的成长来说，好老师所起的作用要大于好父母。］

 父母和老师都是孩子人生中的重要人物。有些人说：“对于孩子的成长来说，好老师所起的作用要大于好父母。”但我并不同意这种说法。

 “父母是孩子的第一任老师”。的确，当一个人降生到这个世界上之后，第一个每天都需要接触的人就是自己的父母，老师只是在几年之后才有可能进入孩子的生活当中，并且陪伴孩子度过的也只是有限的几年时间。在整个儿童和青少年时代，父母都会对孩子产生一种潜移默化的影响，教给孩子做人的准则和奋斗的目标。

 在孩子生命的早期阶段，由父母教给他生活的基本技能和原则。他们教他说第一句话，教他如何站立、如何行走、如何向年长者打招呼，给予他知识的启蒙，帮助他培养坚强的性格和适当的社会礼节，这些对于一个人来说是必不可少的。这些东西都是我在入学之前我的爸爸妈妈教我的。

 好父母能够为子女树立一个效仿的好榜样，而坏父母通常不会培养出好的子女来，正所谓“有其父必有其子”。父母是子女第一个尊重的人，因为父母是子女的保护人，是与子女有着血缘关系的长辈。渊博的知识和睿智的头脑并不是成为好父母的必要条件。如果父母能够以身作则地教育孩子，那么即使这位父母是文盲或者是很贫穷的人，也称得上是好父母。因此，在父母的影响下，孩子的性格通常在入学接受教育之前就已经形成了，而一个好老师借助知识的力量通常做不到这一点。

 好父母是孩子成长的核心因素，因为他们是孩子人生当中的第一任老师，他们的角色不仅仅是一位好老师，他们传授给孩子更多的是生活和思想方面的知识。所以，我们有充分的理由说，好父母才是孩子成长过程中最重要的人。

         广东实验中学  初二（1）班   钟琬婷