为了给国内的网友提供一些美国英文教育的信息，我把美国文学老师的作文评分标准帖出来供大家参考。老师对我们的要求是：根据这个标准，评价同班同学的作文。最近姐睡觉前的最后一件事就是写作业，是个好学生吧。黑字是老师的要求，红字是我根据老师的要求对我班同学作文的评价。

PEER REVIEW PROMPTS


1) Identify the thesis statement of the writer’s essay. Once you’ve identified the thesis, comment on its strengths and weaknesses. If you cannot find the thesis statement, make a note of this in your comments. 


2) Observe the ordering of the paragraphs in the essay. Can you detect a logical reason for why the paragraphs are arranged in the order that they appear in this draft? If so, what is the reason? If not, how might the writer structure the essay in a more logical manner?


3) Is the essay coherent? In other words, are all the paragraphs working toward the common purpose of helping to support the main idea expressed in the thesis statement? 

Within paragraphs, are all the sentences related a common theme or idea? 

What might the writer add or delete to improve the coherence of the essay?

4) Does the writer use primary and secondary sources effectively?Are all sources cited correctly using MLA-style documentation?


5) Note at least one positive aspect of the essay. Be as specific as possible in describing this positive aspect and suggest ways the writer might build on his or her strengths as a writer.

6) Note at least one way in which the writer could improve the essay. Be as specific as possible in suggesting a strategy for revision.

1) Identify the thesis statement of the writer’s essay. Once you’ve identified the thesis, comment on its strengths and weaknesses. If you cannot find the thesis statement, make a note of this in your comments. 

I could not identify the thesis.  Zara talked a lot about Korean War but literacy works related to the war are not introduced.

2) Observe the ordering of the paragraphs in the essay. Can you detect a logical reason for why the paragraphs are arranged in the order that they appear in this draft? If so, what is the reason? If not, how might the writer structure the essay in a more logical manner?

Yes, I could identify a logic reason in Zara’s writing. After introduction paragraph, she talked about government in one paragraph, then family in the next paragraph, and soldiers in the final paragraph.

3) Is the essay coherent? In other words, are all the paragraphs working toward the common purpose of helping to support the main idea expressed in the thesis statement? 

The essay is coherent.

Within paragraphs, are all the sentences related a common theme or idea? 

Yes

What might the writer add or delete to improve the coherence of the essay?

Zara talked about the same information over and over. The repeated introduction about Korean war can be deleted.

4) Does the writer use primary and secondary sources effectively? Are all sources cited correctly using MLA-style documentation?

I did not see works cited.


5) Note at least one positive aspect of the essay. Be as specific as possible in describing this positive aspect and suggest ways the writer might build on his or her strengths as a writer.

Zara is very confident in analysis of poems. She is also good at describing historical event. If Zara can avoid redundancy in different paragraphs, she will be a good writer.

6) Note at least one way in which the writer could improve the essay. Be as specific as possible in suggesting a strategy for revision.

Zara used lots of “ I think….” in her essay. To my knowledge, the statement started with “ I think….”  should be avoided in a critical essay.

Zara, good job!  I enjoyed reading your essay.