THE SHADOW IN THE ROSE GARDEN

                           D.H. Lawrence

                                   影笼玫瑰园

                                   D.H.劳伦斯

                                          颜林海译

【英语原文】

(129)Slowly she went down one path, lingering, like one who has gone back into the past. (130)Suddenly she was touching some heavy crimson roses that were soft as velvet, touching them thoughtfully, without knowing, as a mother sometimes fondles the hand of her child. (131)She leaned slightly forward to catch the scent. (132)Then she wandered on in abstraction. (133)Sometimes a flame-coloured, scentless rose would hold her arrested. (134)She stood gazing at it as if she could not understand it. (135)Again the same softness of intimacy came over her, as she stood before a tumbling heap of pink petals. (136)Then she wondered over the white rose, that was greenish, like ice, in the centre. (137)So, slowly, like a white, pathetic butterfly, she drifted down the path, coming at last to a tiny terrace all full of roses. (138)They seemed to fill the place, a sunny, gay throng. (139)She was shy of them, they were so many and so bright. (140) They seemed to be conversing and laughing. (141)She felt herself in a strange crowd. (142)It exhilarated her, carried her out of herself.（143）She flushed with excitement. The air was pure scent.

(144)Hastily, she went to a little seat among the white roses, and sat down. (145)Her scarlet sunshade made a hard blot of colour. (146) She sat quite still, feeling her own existence lapse. (147) She was no more than a rose, a rose that could not quite come into blossom, but remained tense. (148) A little fly dropped on her knee, on her white dress. (149) She watched it, as if it had fallen on a rose. (150) She was not herself.

【原文解读】

    这是一段非常精彩的景随人动，动中置情的描写。作者通过描写人物园中散步，及其姿态来描写景色，描写心理。一般而言，文学作品中，人物不同的姿态往往体现出不同的心情。此段中，她沿着小径走缓缓地，依依不舍地走着，这种步姿实际上是对过去的留恋（129）。美好的回忆往往使人忘乎所以，使人痴迷陶醉(133)-(134) 。作者对她的痴迷程度进行了细节描写（135——150）。中国有句俗话：否极泰来；意思说，否泰是相互转化的，那就意味着：泰极也会否来。这个术语同样可以用到文学作品的描写上。此处作者极尽其写作之能事描写她如醉如痴的迷恋园中美景：玫瑰花景。这种美景恰好象征了她对爱情的憧憬；但现实是残酷的，憧憬越是美好的东西，越是容易破碎，越是容易失去。因此，小说后面必定会让主人公“她”回到痛苦的现实之中。是否如此呢？且听下节分解。

【汉语译文】

     她沿着一条小径走着，缓缓地，依依不舍地，仿佛回到了过去。突然，她用手抚摸着紫色的玫瑰，花儿柔如丝绒；她亲切地抚摸着，不经意地抚摸着，仿佛母亲时不时地抚摸着婴儿的小手。她将身子向前倾了倾，闻了闻花香，舒展心扉地漫游起来。有时，一朵火红的、无味的玫瑰也会引起她的注意。她站在那儿，凝视着那朵花，仿佛对它充满着疑惑。她停下脚步，面对一簇倒垂的粉色花瓣，那种亲密的柔情又涌上了心头。她看着那朵白色玫瑰，有些惊讶，花心如冰，竟然泛出淡淡的绿色。就这样，她沿着小径轻挪步履，像一只哀怨的白蝴蝶；最后来到一个小露台，露台上全是玫瑰花。那儿仿佛是填满了玫瑰花，灿烂而欢快的玫瑰花簇。看见这些玫瑰，她感到有些羞涩，如此众多，如此鲜艳，仿佛在唠嗑聊天，仿佛在畅怀大笑。她感觉自己身处一个陌生的人群中，心旷神怡，有些飘飘然。她激动得满脸通红。空气中弥漫着清纯的花香。

    很快，她在白色玫瑰花中找到一个小座位，坐了下来。那鲜红的太阳伞显得格外耀眼。她静静地坐着，仿佛忘却了自我。她就是玫瑰，一朵含苞而不放的玫瑰。一只小苍蝇落在她的膝上，落在她那条白色的裙子上。她看着苍蝇，仿佛它是落在一朵玫瑰上。她不是她了。

【翻译津要】

(129) Slowly she went down one path, lingering, like one who has gone back into the past.此句是描写妻子触景生情，缅怀过去，这种缅怀往往带着淡淡的忧伤，因此，翻译时将slowly，lingering易为后置状语。

(130)此句翻译时刈分为五个小句(a)Suddenly she was touching some heavy crimson roses (b)that were soft as velvet, (c)touching them thoughtfully, (d)without knowing, (e)as a mother sometimes fondles the hand of her child.其中(c)小句中的thoughtfully有两种意思：沉思地；亲切地，体贴地；但若与(e)小句的内容练习起来，意为：亲切地，体贴地；(d)小句中的without knowing指不经意，翻译时同词增益：抚摸着。

(132) 此句翻译时可以先刈分为两个小句(a)Then she wandered on (b)in abstraction。其中(a)小句中的then只表示动作的接续，在上下文中，可以遗而不译；wander：roam；(b)小句中的abstraction：absence of mind or preoccupation，此处译为：舒展心扉。然后把两个小句依并在一起。再与前一句依并在一起，因此，代词she遗而不译。

(133) Hold sb arrested意为：To capture and hold briefly (the attention, for example); engage.

(134) as if she could not understand it翻译时采用反正法，译为：仿佛对它充满着疑惑。

(136)此句翻译时刈分为四个小句（a）Then she wondered (b)over the white rose, (c)that was greenish, (d)like ice, in the centre 其中wonder at (over)意为：看见……而吃惊；greenish：slightly green in color.翻译时同义增益“竟然”以表示惊讶的结果。

(138)They seemed to fill the place, a sunny, gay throng中they指前一句中的roses，翻译时采用代词还原增益法，译为：玫瑰。the place指前一句中提及的露台，此处译为：那儿，在译文中作主语。

(139) She was shy of them, they were so many and so bright.中them和they指玫瑰。英语代词的翻译原则是“若要明白，不如名词复说；若要简洁，不如索性不用”（王力）。此句中them采用代词还原增益法，即王力所说的“名词复说”；they采用遗而不译法，即王力所说的“索性不用”。故有此译。

(141)It exhilarated her, carried her out of herself.中carried her out of herself意为：took her out of herself。根据情景和上下文，此处的herself是指小说现实生活中的herself，既然是out of herself，自然是摆脱了小说现实生活中herslef；故译为：有些飘飘然。

(142) The air was pure scent此句为描写句，翻译时增益具有描写动词：弥漫。

(145) Her scarlet sunshade made a hard blot of colour中made a…blot of…字义意为：玷污；Colour指白色的玫瑰，由于上一句中已经出现白色玫瑰，此处遗而不译。此句译为：那鲜红的太阳伞显得格外耀眼。

(146) She sat quite still, feeling her own existence lapse.字面义：她静静地坐着，感觉自己的存在消失了。此处采用易句而译：仿佛忘却了自我。

(147)She was no more than a rose, a rose that could not quite come into blossom, but remained tense.此句象征爱情在她心中已经消亡：含苞而永不待放的玫瑰。no more than意为：only；将could not quite come into blossom与but remained tense依并为一句。