第三部分 高考英语书面表达试题预测练习
1.假设你是新华中学的学生李华,父母答应你今年高三毕业后去英国作10天观光旅游。请你给英国网友TOM写封电子邮件,咨询以下事情:
1、不随旅游团的食宿、交通等问题。
2、必看景点与时间安排。
3、邀请他到中国观光。
格式如下:
Dear Tom,
How's everything going?
_____________________________________________
___________________________________________________________________________
I'm looking forward to your early reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
学生作品:
Dear Tom,
How's everything going? I'm allowed to go out for a 10-day visit
to England after my college entrance examination by my parents.
Now, I'm writing to ask you to do me a favor by telling me
something of vital use in advance.
Here are several questions related to my journey. For one thing,
could you tell me, if I don't attend the local
touristry, the information about my board and
lodging and the traffic situation of England? For another, I can't
wait to be acquainted with the must-see tourist attraction?
Meanwhile, if it doesn't trouble you, could you please help me
arrange the time properly so that I can completely enjoy myself
then? I shall thank you if you will kindly let me have one or two
letters of introduction to England as I'm an entire stranger
there.
In return, it would be my great honor and pleasure if you could
come to China as my guest. I believe I could be a distinguished
guide!
I'm looking forward to your early reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
老师修改意见:(红色部分是修改的地方,紫色是删掉的地方,括号内为批语,大家一定要耐心地一个字一个字地读完啊!)
Dear Tom,
(1)How's everything going? (2) I'm allowed to go out for
(这三个词不如改成 enjoy) a 10-day visit to England after my college
entrance examination by my parents. (3) Now, I'm writing to ask you
to do me a favor by telling me something of vital use in advance.
(首段“咔咔咔”三句话,表达了礼貌的问候,并清晰地交代了写信的背景和目的,看上去相当的老练!完全没什么地方可改嘛!)
(4) Here are several key(关键)
questions related to my journey. (鲜明的主题句中,使用了“Here
are…”的倒装结构,还用了“过去分词作后置定语表被动”这一神话中的英语语法) (5)For one thing, could you
offer me, if I don't attend the local touristry
(按照高中水平,“参加旅行团”是没有办法直译的吧!所以这样翻译出来往往也是不对的喽!那么怎样才能解决这个问题呢?当然是用课上讲的那句话:“换一种方式来表达”——
如果我不找旅行社 if I don’t turn to any tourist
agency,或者把逻辑和时态都升级一下,写成:since I’m not turning to any tourist
agency,由于我不打算找任何旅行社,也行。大家都想想还有别的方式可以把这个意思“表达”出来吗?这可是个小小的挑战哦!)
, the information about my board and lodging and
the traffic situation of England (这里赠送一个简单的升级表达:
一些自助的在英国的食宿及交通信息some self-help accommodation and
transportation information in England)? (6) For another, I
can't wait to be acquainted with
(这里就是阅卷评分标准里所谓的“少许语言错误但因尽力使用复杂结构所致,不扣分”的情况,be acquainted
with这个词组的确很“高档”,但是搭配上有个习惯,就是后面一定要加“人”,表示“认识某人”。所以不如改成visit 甚至 look
around)some must-see tourist attractions. (7) Meanwhile, if it
doesn't trouble you much, could you please help me arrange the time
properly so that I can completely enjoy myself then? (这句太好了…if和so
that两大“尾巴句型”如此熟练地掌握,天衣无缝,鬼斧神工,看得我眼泪都快下来了) (8) I shall thank you if
you will kindly let me have one or two letters of introduction to
England (这块儿有点乱啊,改成introduce me one or two websites on your local
culture and custom 绝对就厉害了,值得一提的是,小状语位置的kindly堪称神来之笔!)as I'm an
entire stranger there. (漂亮的“表原因的尾巴句型”)
In return, it would be my great honor and pleasure if you could
come to China as my guest. I believe I could be a distinguished
guide! (完美的高级词汇!)
I'm looking forward to your early reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
完整的修改背诵版:
Dear Tom,
(1)How's everything going? (2) I'm allowed to enjoy a 10-day
visit to England after my college entrance examination by my
parents. (3) Now, I'm writing to ask you to do me a favor by
telling me something of vital use in advance.
(4) Here are several key questions
related to my journey. (5)For one
thing, could you offer me, since I’m not turning to any
tourist agency, some self-help accommodation and transportation
information in England? (6) For another, I can't wait to
visitsome must-see tourist attractions. (7) Meanwhile, if it
doesn't trouble you much, could you please help me arrange the time
properly so that I can completely enjoy myself then? (8) I shall
thank you if you will kindly introduce me one or two websites on
your local culture and custom as I'm an entire stranger there.
In return, it would be my great honor and pleasure if you could
come to China as my guest. I believe I could be a distinguished
guide!
I'm looking forward to your early reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
2.假设你是李华,你在读美国中学生Jack的博客时了解到他即将作为一名交换生来北京学习,希望能够寄宿在一名擅长英语的中学生家里,以便更好地了解中国文化。请根据以下要点给Jack写一封电子邮件:
1.欢迎他来中国学习;
2.介绍你个人情况;
3.邀请他住在你家并愿意为他提供帮助。
注意:1.词数120-150;
2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
Dear Jack,
I’m very glad to learn that youre coming to Beijing as an exchange student and want to stay in a local home with a middle school student who can speak excellent English.
I’m a high school student, and its my sincere hope that you can stay with me.I am good at English and can communicate with foreigners fluently. Besides, I like reading and traveling in my spare time,so if you are with us, I can take you around Beijing and let you know mere about our brilliant Chinese culture.Both my parents and I are friendly and enthusiastic in personality. So I believe we can be good friends. I’m sureI will do what I can to help you with your Chinese.
I’m looking forward to your coming.
Best wishes.
Yours,