My Dream
April 9th 2013
I am coming to the rainforest and see
many endangred cartoons animals, they are very cute. And there are
many green plants, all kinds of flowers, very beautiful. The bird
is flying (in) the sky, fish is
swimming in the sea. It’s like the wonderland. It’s in the
north.
In
the south, It’s a moden (modern) city,
the facilities is complete. I go to the large building, It sales
cake, I buy the cake, It’s 10 dollars, and I eat the cake, it’s
very delicious.
I walk to
the primary school, the walk is pink, and there are twenty floors,
children can take the lift to classroom, It’s very morden
(modern) , I want to go there to learn
language. It’s in east.
And in the
west ,it’s my favourite collage school
—— hafu school, it’s very big and old. I walk there,
but suddenly, I’m wake up form my dream. What a beautiful
dream！
【备注：文中红色字为浏览此博文的亲们热情指正处，太感动了，由衷地说声“谢谢！”感谢老师们对琳儿的支持、帮助和关爱！辛苦了！
恭祝好人们一生平安！健康快乐！和美幸福！万事吉祥如意！】
琳儿手稿1（老师批阅）
琳儿手稿2（批阅后誊写）
妈妈说明：这是琳儿六年级下期的一篇英语作文，最近整理琳儿小学时的书本才发现，差点被雪藏了，赶紧放到博客里保存着。
妈妈是英语盲，无从判断这篇习作水平如何，看老师修改的地方不算多，改动也不太大，貌似写得还不错吧，呵呵！
但是，这么长的一篇习作竟然完全没有分段，这是琳儿的一个大问题，写中文习作也常出现“分段”混乱的情况，要下功夫好好训练哦！
祝福琳儿学习进步！好梦成真！
链接：
英文习作：My mood（5年级上期）
英文习作：My Favourite
Season（5年级下期）…
英文习作：My name is
Linda（6年年级上期）…
英文习作：Cheng du（6年级上期）
加载中，请稍候......
加载中…